Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to form clear, concise sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, I have been playing basketball for 10 years since childhood, which requires a lot of patience and dedication. Therefore, I believe I am patient and hope to become even more so in the future.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons and examples. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: I feel impatient when I play video games because they distract me from other important tasks. Since I don't enjoy gaming much, I often lose focus and get frustrated quickly.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to organize your ideas and be more specific about your strategies.

例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel bored and tired. For instance, if I study for 10 hours, I get exhausted. Therefore, I take breaks every hour to stay refreshed and maintain my concentration.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas logically. Also, avoid repetition.

例: Yes, my job as a hotel receptionist requires a lot of patience. Many foreign customers who cannot speak Japanese visit the hotel, so I need to communicate in English, even though my English is not perfect. Therefore, I must concentrate carefully during conversations.

提案: Your answer is on topic but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your thoughts clearly and concisely.

例: Definitely, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I have faced many challenges, such as passing difficult examinations, which required a lot of patience. These experiences have helped me develop greater focus and endurance.

× Yes, I am, I'm patient person.

✓ Yes, I am, I'm a patient person.

The noun 'person' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× I like to do same thing for a long time, especially, uh, for example, I do, I play basketball.

✓ I like to do the same thing for a long time, especially, uh, for example, I play basketball.

The phrase 'same thing' requires the definite article 'the' to specify a particular thing.

× I've have played basketball for 10 years since when I was a child, which is really which is, which requires a lot of patience to continue something.

✓ I've played basketball for 10 years since I was a child, which requires a lot of patience to continue something.

The phrase 'I've have' is incorrect; 'I've' (I have) is sufficient. Also, 'since when' is redundant; 'since' alone is correct. The repeated 'which is' is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× So I, I think I'm a patient person and I want to be more patient person in the future.

✓ So I, I think I'm a patient person and I want to be a more patient person in the future.

The phrase 'more patient person' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it because 'person' is a singular countable noun.

× I think game is, are is impatient for me.

✓ I think games are impatient for me.

The subject 'game' should be plural 'games' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'impatient' is incorrectly used to describe games; however, correction focuses on grammar only.

× So when I play, when I play video game, I really, really, umm, distracted other things from other things.

✓ So when I play video games, I really, really, umm, get distracted from other things.

The phrase 'play video game' should be plural 'video games'. Also, 'distracted other things from other things' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'get distracted from other things'.

× So, uh, it's, I need to impatient.

✓ So, uh, I need to be patient.

The phrase 'I need to impatient' is incorrect; 'impatient' is an adjective and requires the verb 'be' to form 'be patient'.

× I feel sometimes bored and tired for a long time when I play something for a long time.

✓ I sometimes feel bored and tired when I do something for a long time.

The phrase 'feel sometimes' is better as 'sometimes feel'. Also, 'play something' is incorrect; 'do something' is more appropriate for general activities.

× It's for example when I study for when I study for 10 hours or something, I think I'm really tired and I'm bored.

✓ For example, when I study for 10 hours or so, I think I'm really tired and bored.

The phrase 'It's for example when I study for when I study for' is redundant and awkward; 'For example, when I study for' is correct. 'Or something' is better expressed as 'or so'.

× So to not feel to avoid that I try to take a breaking for each and for each hours each an hour.

✓ So to avoid that, I try to take a break every hour.

The phrase 'take a breaking' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'a break'. Also, 'for each and for each hours each an hour' is redundant and incorrect; 'every hour' is appropriate.

× Yes, it does my job.

✓ Yes, it does.

The phrase 'Yes, it does my job' is ungrammatical; the correct response is 'Yes, it does.' to answer the question.

× It my job as a hotel reception requires a lot of patience because many, many foreign customers came to my hotel who cannot speak Japanese.

✓ My job as a hotel receptionist requires a lot of patience because many foreign customers come to my hotel who cannot speak Japanese.

The phrase 'It my job as a hotel reception' is incorrect; it should be 'My job as a hotel receptionist'. Also, 'came' should be present tense 'come' to match the present tense context.

× So I need to I need to speak English even though I my English is not a good wealth.

✓ So I need to speak English even though my English is not very good.

The phrase 'not a good wealth' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'not very good' to describe language ability.

× So I need to concentrate on the conversation.

✓ So I need to concentrate on the conversation.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.

× Definitely, yes, I am more patient than when I was a child because I through many events like challenge, challenging events like passing examinations, passing examination, it requires a lot of patience.

✓ Definitely, yes, I am more patient than when I was a child because I went through many challenging events like passing examinations, which require a lot of patience.

The verb 'through' is incorrect; the past tense verb 'went through' is needed. 'Challenge, challenging events' is redundant; 'challenging events' is sufficient. 'Passing examination' should be plural 'examinations'. 'It requires' should be 'which require' to agree with plural 'events'.

× So through these events, I got patients, uh, and, and I, I need to focus on some task for a long time.

✓ So through these events, I got patience, uh, and I need to focus on some tasks for a long time.

The word 'patients' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'patience'. Also, 'some task' should be plural 'some tasks' to be grammatically correct.