Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency by reducing hesitation sounds like 'uh' and use correct verb forms. Also, add linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific examples.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because when I face problems in life, I stay calm and carefully think to find the best solution.

提案: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Avoid repetition and use appropriate vocabulary to express feelings clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I feel impatient when someone behaves rudely towards me because it makes me angry and uncomfortable.

提案: Use correct grammar and vocabulary, such as 'bored' instead of 'boring' and 'impatient' instead of 'a impatient'. Also, organize your answer with linking words and avoid redundancy.

例: I feel bored when I have to do something for a long time, so I become impatient. Therefore, I try to work harder to finish the task quickly.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use correct forms like 'patience' instead of 'patient'. Provide a complete and coherent answer with linking words.

例: Yes, I work as a teacher, so I need a lot of patience because students often ask questions and need help with activities or homework.

提案: Focus on correct grammar and vocabulary, avoid filler words, and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to compare past and present clearly.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Previously, I would get angry and bored quickly, but now, as a teacher, I have learned to be much more patient.

× I patient and I found the best solution to solve my issue.

✓ I am patient and I find the best solution to solve my issue.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' to correctly link the subject 'I' with the adjective 'patient'. Also, 'found' is past tense, but the context requires present tense 'find' to match the ongoing ability.

× I feel impatient when someone uh, rude, uh, acting me or uh, do something, uh rude action uh, I didn't impatient for that so I feel angry and I can't stay in.

✓ I feel impatient when someone is rude, acts towards me rudely, or does something rude. I don't feel patient about that, so I feel angry and I can't stay calm.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and pronoun usage. 'Someone rude' needs a verb 'is' to be correct. 'Acting me' should be 'acts towards me'. 'Didn't impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'don't feel patient'. The sentence structure is also fragmented and needs to be clarified.

× I feel boring so I will start a impatient for that because the work or the something need long time so I want to finish fastly that so I work hard to take less time to finish.

✓ I feel bored, so I start to feel impatient because the work or something needs a long time. I want to finish it quickly, so I work hard to take less time to finish.

'Boring' is an adjective describing something that causes boredom; 'bored' describes the feeling. 'A impatient' is incorrect; it should be 'impatient'. 'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject. 'Fastly' is not a correct adverb; 'quickly' is appropriate.

× Yes my I work as a teacher so a teacher need a lot of patient for students.

✓ Yes, I work as a teacher, so a teacher needs a lot of patience for students.

'My I' is incorrect; it should be 'I'. 'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject 'a teacher'. 'Patient' is an adjective; the noun 'patience' is needed here.

× When students ask. When students do activity or homework they need a lot and much of patience.

✓ When students ask or do activities or homework, they need a lot of patience.

The sentence is fragmented and 'a lot and much of patience' is incorrect. Use either 'a lot of patience' or 'much patience', but not both together. Also, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match 'students'.

× Yes, sure, when I was a child, I angry fastly and uh, feel uh, boring uh, uh fastly.

✓ Yes, sure, when I was a child, I got angry quickly and felt bored quickly.

'I angry fastly' is incorrect; it should be 'I got angry quickly'. 'Boring' should be 'bored' to describe feeling. 'Fastly' is not a correct adverb; 'quickly' is appropriate.

× But now I'm a patient person, uh, like when I say I'm a teacher. So our job need uh, much or a lot of pay.

✓ But now I'm a patient person. Like when I say I'm a teacher, our job needs a lot of patience.

'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject 'job'. 'Much or a lot of pay' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'a lot of patience' to match the meaning. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.