Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, clear topic sentence and avoid repetition and grammar errors. Use simple, accurate vocabulary and one or two supporting reasons. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, my religion and upbringing emphasize patience, so I try to stay calm and composed when dealing with others, and people often appreciate that.

提案: Start with a clear statement of what makes you impatient, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words like 'when' and 'because' correctly and avoid repeating words.

例: I feel impatient when other people are rude or disrespectful. For instance, if a colleague interrupts me or talks over me during a meeting, I become annoyed because it wastes time and shows a lack of consideration.

提案: Answer directly with a clear emotion, then give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague words like 'envious' if not applicable. Use one linking word such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: I usually feel tired and a bit anxious when I have to do something for a very long time. For example, working on the same task for several hours makes me restless because my concentration drops and I need a break to be effective.

提案: Give a concise yes/no topic sentence and one clear reason with an example from work. Fix grammar (present tense) and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I handle clients and work closely with colleagues. For example, when a client is frustrated, staying patient helps me resolve the issue calmly and maintain good relationships.

提案: Respond with a clear comparison and one specific reason or example. Use correct comparative language ('more patient than') and avoid repeating phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. With more life and work experience, I have learned to stay calm in tense situations at work, which helps me communicate better with colleagues and clients.

× Yeah, absolutely right, because patient person is one of the most clue and the kindness in the character of person.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Being a patient person is one of the most important and kind qualities in a person's character.

The sentence used incorrect words ('clue') and awkward adjective placement. 'Patient person' needs an article and gerund 'Being a patient person'. 'Most clue' is wrong; likely meant 'most important'. 'The kindness in the character of person' should be 'kind qualities in a person's character'. Improve by choosing appropriate adjectives and using possessive form for 'person'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× And because of that each my also my religion is passes in passes to be a patient because when you being a patient, the all of the pers person and people admire you.

✓ Also, my religion teaches me to be patient because when you are patient, people admire you.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun order ('each my also my'), wrong verb forms ('is passes in passes to be'), and incorrect article use ('the all of the pers person'). Use 'my religion teaches me' and 'when you are patient' for correct pronoun and verb usage. Simplify structure and use correct verb 'are'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Being and feeling a patient is very is the looks when when you gets a dialogue with each other the the second person is disrespect disrespect you and gets and gets you feeling annoying and anxious.

✓ Being and feeling patient looks bad when you have a dialogue with someone who is disrespectful; it makes you feel annoyed and anxious.

Incorrect use of 'a patient' (article) and verb forms: 'gets' should be 'have' or 'are' depending on subject. Repetitions removed. Use 'annoyed' (adjective) instead of 'annoying' to describe the person's feelings. Use 'someone who is disrespectful' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:10

× So because because I I can say that that you or or he are loss losing disrespectful for.

✓ So I can say that you or he are being disrespectful.

Original contains repetitions and incorrect phrase 'loss losing disrespectful for'. Correct structure is 'are being disrespectful'. Use continuous form for ongoing behavior. Remove duplicates and unnecessary words. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Is very embarrassing and envious in being enviously because when you do something when you something do for a long time, it's been it gets inner nervous and most of and most of the people's from my life are gated from from that period of long for doing one thing a long time.

✓ It is very embarrassing and makes you envious when you do something for a long time; it makes you nervous, and many people in my life have been affected by long periods of doing one thing.

Sentence has wrong adjective/adverb forms ('envious in being enviously'), incorrect word order, and incorrect noun forms ('people's' should be 'people'). Use 'makes you nervous' and 'many people...have been affected' for correct tense and phrasing. Simplify and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Absolutely right, because my job, my job is just about businesses and when for when my colleague, when I if I will will not being a patient that all of my colleague colleagues are will will kick, will kick out and get disrespect, get disrespected and feel and feels gets feels me anxious.

✓ Absolutely. My job is about business, and if I am not patient, my colleagues may react negatively, disrespect me, or even exclude me, which makes me anxious.

Original misuses modals and future forms ('if I will will not being a patient', 'are will will kick'). Use conditional present: 'if I am not patient' and modal 'may' for possible reaction. Use correct verbs 'disrespect me' and 'exclude me'. Remove repetitions. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Yeah, because, but time by time and time by time and experience by experience, I become, I become more patient, more, more patient than my childhood because now my job requires a lot of patience because I closely works with my colleagues and clients and situations can become tense if I'm not patient, people feel feel disrespect or.

✓ Yes. Over time and with experience, I have become more patient than I was in my childhood because my job now requires a lot of patience. I work closely with colleagues and clients, and situations can become tense if I'm not patient; people feel disrespected.

Issues: tense consistency and subject-verb agreement ('I become' should be present perfect 'I have become'; 'I closely works' should be 'I work closely'). Remove repetitions and fix ending 'people feel feel disrespect or' to 'people feel disrespected'. Use present perfect for changes over time. Grammar problem type ID:6