Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct grammar and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I am usually a patient person), then give one short reason or example. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (use 'patient' not 'patience'). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I am usually a patient person. For example, when plans change I stay calm and think about the next steps. However, I sometimes lose patience if delays are repeated.

提案: Answer directly with a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, when, for example) and correct verb forms (makes me impatient, they are late). Keep sentences short and logical.

例: I become impatient when people are repeatedly late. For example, if a meeting is scheduled and attendees arrive late without warning, I get frustrated because it wastes everyone's time.

提案: Give a clear emotional response and explain why, using one or two supporting details. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid hesitation sounds. Be specific about the task type or outcome to make your answer concrete.

例: When I have to work on a task for a long time, I usually feel irritated because it becomes monotonous and I worry about deadlines. If the task has clear milestones and breaks, I can stay focused for longer.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and a concise explanation with specific details about the job. Correct grammar (my job requires me to be patient) and avoid unclear words (mopping?). Provide a short example of a situation that needs patience.

例: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience. I work in physical therapy, and patients often need 10–15 days or more to show improvement, so I must encourage them and monitor progress calmly.

提案: Compare past and present clearly with a reason and one brief example. Use correct comparative structures (more patient, less patient) and linking words (because, when). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: No, I am less patient now than when I was a child because I have more responsibilities and less free time. For instance, if plans are poorly organized at work, I become annoyed more quickly than I used to.

× Yes, I am a patience person usually, usually patient person because I have a not a quite these things which happen.

✓ Yes, I am usually a patient person because I do not get upset by these things that happen.

The student used the noun 'patience' instead of the adjective 'patient' and had word order issues ('a not a quite these things'). Use the adjective 'patient' to describe a person and correct word order: 'usually' before 'a patient person' and 'do not get upset by these things' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: Practice using adjective forms (patient) after linking verbs and place adverbs (usually) before the adjective.

× How now? Now what to do?

✓ What should I do now?

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use a full interrogative sentence with auxiliary 'should' for asking about the appropriate action: 'What should I do now?'. Suggestion: Form questions with auxiliary verbs and correct word order (Question word + auxiliary + subject + verb).

× So I have a quite a patient person but not always.

✓ So I am a quite patient person, but not always.

The student used 'have' instead of the verb 'be' for a state and included extra articles ('a quite a'). Use 'I am a quite patient person' or better 'I am quite a patient person' and add contrast 'but not always.' Suggestion: Use 'be' to describe states and avoid double articles.

× OK, uh I am a usually a patients person but I makes impatient when when something are on the time if the time is allocated but they are not going there at the time.

✓ OK, I am usually a patient person, but I become impatient when someone is supposed to be on time and they do not arrive then.

Multiple issues: 'a usually a patients person' mixes articles and plural noun 'patients' instead of adjective 'patient'; 'I makes' is wrong form; 'something are on the time' uses wrong number and preposition. Use 'usually' before adjective, 'patient' (adjective), 'become impatient' or 'get impatient', singular 'someone is' and 'arrive' to express arriving on time. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms, correct verb forms for subject-verb agreement, and clearer wording for punctuality situations.

× So I feel is the impatient and I quite more angry with other.

✓ So I feel impatient and I get quite angry with others.

Redundant 'is the' and incorrect comparative 'quite more angry' and singular 'other'. Use 'feel impatient', 'get quite angry', and plural 'others'. Suggestion: Use simple adjective phrases ('feel impatient') and correct plural forms for people ('others').

× When I have to do something for a long time, I get, uh, irritated and I get angry because of the something to do with do so in the specific time.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, I get irritated and angry because it needs to be done within a specific time.

Awkward phrasing 'because of the something to do with do so in the specific time.' Use 'because it needs to be done within a specific time' to explain reason. Maintain present simple tense for habitual situations. Suggestion: Practice expressing reasons with 'because' plus a clear clause and use consistent tense.

× Uh, this is not always in a long time.

✓ This is not always the case for long tasks.

The original is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Not always in a long time' is incorrect. Use 'not always the case for long tasks' to convey that the irritation is not always tied to duration. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases like 'the case' and specify what 'long time' refers to.

× Yes, definitely my job require you be required to be patient because uh, I am a treating the patient with the physical health.

✓ Yes, definitely my job requires me to be patient because I treat patients with physical health issues.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my job require' should be 'my job requires'. Pronoun and verb form wrong: 'you be required to be patient' is incorrect for referring to self; use 'me to be patient'. 'I am a treating the patient' incorrect article and progressive form; use simple present 'I treat patients'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and use appropriate pronouns; use simple present for habitual job duties.

× So it is the not in, uh improve in a two to three days.

✓ So it does not improve in two to three days.

Awkward passive/phrase 'it is the not in, uh improve'. Use negative present simple 'does not improve' and omit unnecessary articles. Suggestion: Use 'does not' + base verb for negatives with 'it' subject.

× It is the quite a long time, uh like 10 to 15 days.

✓ It is quite a long time, like 10 to 15 days.

Extra article 'the' is unnecessary: say 'It is quite a long time.' Keep quantifier placement natural. Suggestion: Use 'quite a long time' without extra articles.

× So it's required of mopping.

✓ So it requires a lot of patience.

'Required of mopping' is meaningless here. The speaker likely meant 'it requires patience'. Replace with clear noun phrase 'a lot of patience.' Suggestion: Use simple and clear expressions to state requirements (requires + noun).

× No, I am not more patient, uh, than the when I am child, because at the time I have a more patient.

✓ No, I am not more patient now than when I was a child, because at that time I was more patient.

Tense and comparative issues: use past tense 'was' for childhood; correct comparative phrasing 'more patient now than when I was a child' and 'I was more patient' for past state. Remove extra articles. Suggestion: Use past tense for past states and keep comparative structure 'more X now than when I was Y'.

× But nowadays, day by day, my patient level are decreased because the, if some things are not, uh, uh, not prepared in the same time, So I lose, lose my patient and I get easily.

✓ But nowadays my patience level has decreased day by day because if some things are not prepared at the same time, I lose my patience and I get upset easily.

Multiple errors: 'patient level are decreased' incorrect subject-verb and form; use 'patience' (noun) and present perfect 'has decreased' for a change over time; 'not prepared in the same time' wrong preposition—use 'at the same time'; 'lose my patient' should be 'lose my patience'; 'I get easily' incomplete—use 'get upset easily.' Suggestion: Use correct nouns ('patience'), correct verb tense for gradual change ('has decreased'), correct prepositions ('at the same time'), and idiomatic expressions ('lose my patience', 'get upset easily').