Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意语法和词汇的准确性，保持句子简洁并直接回答问题。开头应有一个明确的主题句（例如：No, I'm not very patient），然后用1-2句具体的例子支持观点。避免拼写错误（patience→patient）、冗长重复和不连贯的短语，使用连接词（for example, because）使表达更流畅。

例: No, I'm not very patient. My major is architectural design, which involves many detailed tasks that take a long time, so I often feel frustrated when projects progress slowly. For example, I get impatient when I have to revise the same drawing repeatedly because it wastes a lot of time.

提案: 回答要更直接并用更准确的词汇表达原因，避免语法错误与模糊表述。先给出主题句（Children make me impatient），然后用具体例子和理由支持（they ask many questions and are noisy），并使用连接词（because, for example）。注意单复数和时态一致。

例: Children make me impatient because they have endless energy and ask lots of questions. For example, a child might ask complicated questions about stars repeatedly, which can be tiring if I need to concentrate on work.

提案: 结构上先给出直接回答，然后说明原因并补充结果。注意避免重复词汇和语法错误，使用连接词（however, but, because）使逻辑清晰。结尾可以用一句总结性的陈述。

例: When I have to work on something for a long time, I usually feel impatient because it prevents me from doing other tasks. However, after I finish, I often feel a strong sense of achievement, which makes the effort worthwhile.

提案: 回答要简洁明确，先肯定或否定，再解释原因并给出具体细节。注意词汇搭配（spend more time, attention or patience）和语法（require me to be patient）。避免模糊的短语如 "the everythings"。

例: Yes, my work as an architectural designer requires a lot of patience. I often spend many hours refining construction details, façades and patterns, and careful review is necessary to avoid mistakes.

提案: 先给出明确比较（Yes, I'm more patient now），然后说明原因并用具体例子支持。注意语法（I lacked self-control, I'm not impatient → I was impatient），用连接词（because, so）使语句连贯。避免直译表达如 "spirits in that hands"。

例: Yes, I'm definitely more patient now than when I was a child because I lacked self-control before. For instance, as a child I would get angry quickly, but now I can stay calm and think things through because I've learned coping strategies at university and work.

× I don't think I'm a patience people's because in Daily Times my majors always have many details design need to do like a construction design and appearance designs.

✓ I don't think I'm a patient person, because in my daily life my major always has many detailed designs to do, like construction design and appearance design.

句中将形容词 "patient" 错误写为名词 "patience"，且复数与所有格形式（"people's"）不正确；需要用形容词修饰人（a patient person）。此外，"Daily Times" 用法不当，应为“my daily life”；"details design" 应为形容词 + 名词结构 "detailed designs"。建议记住形容词和名词的区分，并使用正确的短语顺序（形容词放在名词前）。

× They need to waste too much time and remind me need to care for us and I can.

✓ They need to spend too much time and remind me that I need to take care of them, and I can.

原句中代词使用混乱（"They" 指代不明，"us" 与句意不符），并且缺少连词引导宾语从句（that）。"waste time" 常被替换为中性表达 "spend time"。建议明确代词指代对象，使用完整的从句结构：remind me that + 从句。

× I feel impatience about the children's because in my opinions they always energy and be curious about everything.

✓ I feel impatient about children because in my opinion they are always energetic and curious about everything.

"impatience" 是名词，需用形容词 "impatient" 来描述人的情绪；"the children's" 使用错误，应该为复数名词 "children"；"in my opinions" 应为单数短语 "in my opinion"；动词 "be" 需要与主语连用且变为 "are"；"energy" 用作名词不合适，应使用形容词 "energetic"。建议注意形容词/名词形式及单复数与动词一致。

× So he always ask you some questions about the what's the stars of lightliness?

✓ So he always asks you questions like "What are the stars made of?"

主语为第三人称单数（he），谓语动词需加 -s（asks）。问题的表达也不自然，需改为正确的问句结构（What are the stars made of?）或其他合适内容。建议注意第三人称单数动词变化并使用正确的疑问句语序。

× That's kind of questions. And you, you maybe sometimes you can eat these.

✓ Those are the kinds of questions. And sometimes you can get tired of them.

原句中名词单复数及搭配错误（"That's kind of questions" 应为复数形式 "Those are the kinds of questions" 或 "That's the kind of question"）。"you can eat these" 直译不合语境，应该用 "get tired of them" 表示“厌烦”。建议学习固定搭配及语义相近的正确表达。

× In that process, maybe I will feel so impatient and feel difficult because these things may be waste me long times to do that and I can't do other things.

✓ In that process, I may feel very impatient and find it difficult because these things may take me a long time to do, and I can't do other things.

原句时态和表达混乱：使用了 will 和 may 混合，建议统一用情态动词 may 表示可能性。"feel difficult" 应为 "find it difficult"；"waste me long times" 是错误结构，正确为 "take me a long time"。建议掌握固定搭配（take sb. a long time; find it difficult）并保持时态一致。

× But after finishing this since maybe I will feel a stronger sense of achievement because.

✓ But after finishing this, I may feel a stronger sense of achievement.

原句中多余的连词 "since" 与句尾的不完整从句 "because" 导致句子结构不完整。将句子简化为完整的主谓宾结构并去掉多余词即可。建议写句子时检查从属连词的配对和句子完整性。

× So I need to spend more times and patience to design some constructions details like appearance and patterns and so on.

✓ So I need to spend more time and be patient when designing construction details like appearance and patterns.

"more times" 不合适，应为不可数名词 "more time"；"patience" 是名词，但此处更自然用形容词短语 "be patient"；"constructions details" 词序错误，应为 "construction details"。建议区分可数/不可数名词并使用正确的词序与词性搭配。

× So that's require me the patience to the everythings.

✓ So that requires me to be patient with everything.

"That's require" 主谓不一致，应为 "That requires"（第三人称单数）。"the patience to the everythings" 结构错误，正确为 "to be patient with everything"，且 everything 不加复数。建议注意主谓一致、固定短语 and 不可数名词用法。

× Yes, that's definitely when I was child. I like lack of the ability of controls, so I can't easily control my emotions and spirits in that hands.

✓ Yes, definitely when I was a child. I lacked the ability to control myself, so I couldn't easily control my emotions at that time.

"when I was child" 缺少不定冠词，应为 "a child"。时态应为过去（was -> was, like lack -> lacked），情态也需用过去式（can't -> couldn't）。"ability of controls" 词序和形式错误，应为 "ability to control"；"in that hands" 不合语境，应为 "at that time" 或 "back then"。建议注意冠词、动词时态和固定搭配（ability to do sth., could/couldn't）。

× So I'm not impatience and in these days with the study more knowledge, I feel I'm more patient.

✓ So I wasn't impatient, and these days with more study and knowledge, I feel I'm more patient.

"not impatience" 用词错误，应为形容词 "not impatient"（或 wasn't impatient）；"in these days" 更自然为 "these days"；"with the study more knowledge" 语序不当，改为 "with more study and knowledge"。建议注意形容词与名词的正确形式及词序。