Patience— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are patient, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid unnecessary phrases like “thank you for the question” and fix grammar (e.g. "younger" → "temper" or "frustration"). Use linking words such as "but" or "however" to contrast.

例: I am sometimes patient but not always. For example, I try to stay calm with long tasks, but I get frustrated quickly when people interrupt my work or when progress is very slow.

提案: State one clear cause, then give a concrete example and use correct collocations (e.g. "in a hurry" not "hush", "impatient" not "unpatient"). Use a linking word like "for example" to introduce the example.

例: I feel impatient when I am in a hurry. For example, if I need to finish a report quickly and colleagues delay giving me documents, I get stressed and impatient.

提案: Begin with a clear statement about your feelings, then explain why with a specific reason. Use natural adjectives ("bored" not "boring") and a linking word such as "because" to explain the cause.

例: I feel bored and restless when I have to do something for a long time because repetitive tasks make me lose focus and I rush to finish them.

提案: Answer directly and support with a specific duty or example from your job. Use correct grammar and collocations ("a government employee", "be patient"). Keep it to one or two sentences.

例: Yes, my job as a government employee requires a lot of patience. For instance, I must carefully listen to citizens' problems and follow procedures even when cases are complex or time-consuming.

提案: Give a clear comparison and one specific reason or example. Use correct comparative grammar ("more patient now than when I was a child") and avoid vague phrases. Use "because" to link reason and example.

例: Yes, I am more patient now than as a child because with age I have learned to manage my emotions. For example, I used to get angry quickly, but now I think before I react and try to solve problems calmly.

× And thank you for the question. Sometimes I think I am a patient person and sometimes I think I'm not a patient person because my younger is become so high rapidly.

✓ And thank you for the question. Sometimes I think I am a patient person and sometimes I think I'm not a patient person because my anger has become very strong recently.

The original used 'my younger is become so high rapidly' which is ungrammatical and used incorrect words and forms. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and wrong word choice. 'Younger' is not the right noun; likely the speaker meant 'anger' or 'temper'. Use present perfect 'has become' to indicate a change over time and 'very strong recently' or 'increased rapidly' as correct adjective/adverb phrase. Suggestion: choose the correct noun (anger/temper), use 'has become' for recent change, and use an appropriate adverb ('recently' or 'rapidly') with a suitable adjective ('strong', 'high' is unnatural here).

× OK, when I have a hush to work it makes me unpatient.

✓ OK, when I am in a hurry to work, it makes me impatient.

The phrase 'have a hush' is incorrect and 'unpatient' is not a standard word. This is an adjective/adverb misuse. Use the noun/phrase 'in a hurry' or 'in a rush' and the correct adjective 'impatient'. Suggestion: say 'when I am in a hurry' or 'when I am in a rush' and use 'impatient' as the adjective describing your state.

× Or when someone have to submit any paper to me or I have to submit anything to my higher authority it makes me impatient.

✓ Or when someone has to submit any paper to me, or when I have to submit anything to my higher authority, it makes me impatient.

The verb 'have' does not agree with singular subject 'someone'; it should be 'has'. Also the sentence needs clearer parallel structure and commas. This is a subject-verb agreement error and sentence structure issue. Suggestion: use 'someone has' and repeat 'when' for parallel clauses, and add commas for clarity.

× I feel so much boring and so much rushed when I have to do something for the long time and I think from it I can say that I am impatient.

✓ I feel very bored and very rushed when I have to do something for a long time, and from that I can say that I am impatient.

The original uses 'so much boring' (should be 'bored' - past participle/adjective) and 'for the long time' (wrong article). This is misuse of adjectives/adverbs and articles. Use 'very bored' not 'boring' to describe the speaker's feeling, and 'for a long time' for duration. Also restructure 'from that' instead of 'from it' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms to describe feelings ('bored') and proper articles ('a long time').

× Yes, as a government service holder I am, I have to be very much patience to the people, to the country and to the laws.

✓ Yes, as a government employee I am; I have to be very patient with the people, with the country, and with the laws.

The sentence uses 'patience' (a noun) where the adjective 'patient' is required; 'service holder' is unnatural—use 'government employee'. Preposition 'to' is incorrect with 'patient'; use 'patient with'. This is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and prepositions. Suggestion: use 'patient' as the adjective and 'patient with' to indicate whom you are patient toward; improve noun choice to 'government employee'.

× Yes, I think I'm more patient now than when I was child because according to the ages, it is the natural tendency to become patients in human being and and in the lining of it, I am becoming more patients than the older of mine.

✓ Yes, I think I'm more patient now than when I was a child because, as people grow older, it is natural to become more patient, and in line with that, I am becoming more patient than I used to be.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child', awkward phrase 'according to the ages', incorrect plural forms 'patients' and 'more patients', and incorrect comparative wording 'the older of mine'. These are present tense and adjective errors. Use 'as people grow older' for general statement (present simple), 'more patient' (correct comparative adjective), and 'than I used to be' to compare past self. Suggestion: add articles where needed, use correct singular adjectives, and use standard expressions for aging and comparison.