Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点并提供了理由，但句子结构稍显重复，且部分表达不够自然。建议使用更简洁流畅的句式，并避免重复表达“convenient”。

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time compared to washing clothes by hand. Additionally, it has a drying function that quickly dries clothes, which is very helpful.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，且逻辑连接不够清晰。建议注意句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I believe washing machines are important because some detergents can harm our hands, and machines make washing more efficient. However, sweeping machines are less essential since we can clean floors effectively by hand.

提案: 回答较为完整且表达清晰，但“instruction”应为复数形式“instructions”，且可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. Reading the instructions is very important because it helps us use the machine correctly and efficiently. Otherwise, we might damage the machine, which could be dangerous.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，注意语法和词汇的正确使用。

例: Yes, I think it's essential to read the instructions before using machines. This helps us learn how to operate them correctly and safely, preventing any damage or danger.

× It saves the time that washing clothes by hand and there is a function of the washing machine that it can dry the clothes in a short time, which is very convenient.

✓ It saves the time of washing clothes by hand and there is a function of the washing machine that can dry the clothes in a short time, which is very convenient.

这里“the time that washing clothes by hand”中的“washing clothes”应改为“of washing clothes”，表示“洗衣服的时间”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× Well, I think the washing machines are important because some laundry detergent is harmful for a human hand and it's more convenient and efficient to wash clothes by machines.

✓ Well, I think washing machines are important because some laundry detergents are harmful to human hands and it's more convenient and efficient to wash clothes by machines.

“some laundry detergent”应使用复数“some laundry detergents”，因为指的是多种洗衣剂；“harmful for a human hand”应改为“harmful to human hands”，介词和复数形式更准确。

× But the sweeping machines are less important because it can we can sweep the floor completely by our.

✓ But sweeping machines are less important because we can sweep the floor completely by ourselves.

句子结构混乱，“it can we can”重复且不通顺，应删去“it can”，并将“by our”改为“by ourselves”，使句子完整且语法正确。

× Reading the instruction is very important because it helps us to use the machine correctly and efficiently.

✓ Reading the instructions is very important because it helps us to use the machine correctly and efficiently.

“instruction”应使用复数形式“instructions”，因为通常指多条使用说明。

× If we don't read them, we might damage the machine and it can be very dangerous.

✓ If we don't read them, we might damage the machine and it can be very dangerous.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× Yes, as as I said it's pretty essential to read instruction before using the machines because we can learn how to use machine correctly and effective and we if we don't read the instruction we may damage the machine and it can be dangerous.

✓ Yes, as I said, it's pretty essential to read instructions before using machines because we can learn how to use machines correctly and effectively, and if we don't read the instructions, we may damage the machine and it can be dangerous.

“read instruction”应为“read instructions”，“use machine”应为“use machines”，“effective”应为副词“effectively”，并且句子中缺少逗号和连词，需调整句子结构使其通顺。