Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并避免重复。可以多用连词使句子更流畅。

例: My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it helps me keep food fresh. Especially in summer, I often get ice cream from it to refresh myself when I'm tired or unhappy.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和语法混乱，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，明确表达观点，并用连词连接句子。

例: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and energy for families. Moreover, they help keep the home clean and comfortable, which improves the family atmosphere.

提案: 回答有些重复，语法不够准确。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和单复数形式。

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a new machine because I want to understand how to operate it properly and use it efficiently.

提案: 回答不完整且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，注意语法和句子结构，使用连词使句子连贯。

例: I believe it is very important to read the instructions first. As technology develops, many machines become complex, so reading instructions helps us use them correctly and avoid damage.

× My favorite machine was the refrigerator, 'cause when I feel, when I feel tired or unhappy, I will, I will carry, I will bring some ice cream from our refrigerator.

✓ My favorite machine is the refrigerator, 'cause when I feel tired or unhappy, I bring some ice cream from our refrigerator.

这里谈论的是现在的喜好，应该用一般现在时，而不是过去时。'was'应改为'is'。另外，重复的'when I feel'和'I will'不必要，简化句子更自然。

× Well, from my perspective, washing machine and sewing machine are are very necessary for families because it can save a lot of money, receive a lot of time and energy to for people and it's a very efficiency, it can adjust the atmosphere of families reduce.

✓ Well, from my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very necessary for families because they can save a lot of money, save a lot of time and energy for people, and they are very efficient. They can improve the atmosphere of families.

这里提到多个机器，应使用复数形式'washing machines'和'sweeping machines'。动词也应与复数主语一致，使用'are'和'they can'。另外，'efficiency'是名词，形容词应为'efficient'。句子结构也需调整使表达更清晰。

× Well, from my perspective, washing machine and sewing machine are are very necessary for families because it can save a lot of money, receive a lot of time and energy to for people and it's a very efficiency, it can adjust the atmosphere of families reduce.

✓ Well, from my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very necessary for families because they can save a lot of money, save a lot of time and energy for people, and they are very efficient. They can improve the atmosphere of families.

原句中'energy to for people'的介词使用错误，应改为'energy for people'。介词使用不当会导致句意不清。

× Well, from my perspective, washing machine and sewing machine are are very necessary for families because it can save a lot of money, receive a lot of time and energy to for people and it's a very efficiency, it can adjust the atmosphere of families reduce.

✓ Well, from my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines are very necessary for families because they can save a lot of money, save a lot of time and energy for people, and they are very efficient. They can improve the atmosphere of families.

'a very efficiency'中'efficiency'是名词，需用形容词'efficient'来修饰。形容词和副词的正确使用能使表达更准确。

× Well, to be honest, I always read the instruction, especially a new machine 'cause maybe I don't know whether it operates and whether it can be used better.

✓ Well, to be honest, I always read the instructions, especially for a new machine, because maybe I don't know how it operates and whether it can be used better.

'instruction'应为复数形式'instructions'，因为通常说明书是多条指令的集合。

× Well, to be honest, I always read the instruction, especially a new machine 'cause maybe I don't know whether it operates and whether it can be used better.

✓ Well, to be honest, I always read the instructions, especially for a new machine, because maybe I don't know how it operates and whether it can be used better.

'especially a new machine'缺少介词，应为'especially for a new machine'，表示针对新机器。

× Well, I reckon it's very important to read the instructment firstly.

✓ Well, I reckon it's very important to read the instructions first.

'instructment'拼写错误，应为'instructions'。'firstly'在口语中常用'first'更自然。

× With the development of the technology, many new machines become very become very complex and we don't know whether it can be used and it's easy to be destroyed when we.

✓ With the development of technology, many new machines have become very complex, and we don't know whether they can be used properly, and they are easy to be damaged if we don't use them correctly.

'become very become very complex'重复，应删去重复部分。'the technology'中'technology'前不需要定冠词。'it can be used'应改为'they can be used'，因为主语是复数。'destroyed'改为'damaged'更合适。句子不完整，需补充完整表达。