Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, use 'to wake me up' instead of 'to wake me up and to clear my mind' as the latter is repetitive. Also, correct 'it just like to maintain my life' to 'it helps me start my day'.

例: My favourite machine at home is the coffee maker because I need a cup every morning to wake up and clear my mind. It helps me start my day and keeps me going.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and by linking ideas more smoothly. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: I believe washing machines are more important than sweeping machines because they save a lot of time and effort when doing laundry, which can be very time-consuming. Although I enjoy sweeping, it is not essential in my household.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more coherent by using linking words and correcting grammar. For example, use 'if the machine seems complicated, I explore its functions but still read the instructions carefully to avoid mistakes.'

例: Yes, I usually glance at the instructions for safety before using a machine. However, if the machine seems complicated, I explore its functions myself but always read the instructions carefully to avoid mistakes.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Use linking words to contrast ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, say 'If you are familiar with a product, you may not need to read the instructions in detail. However, when using a new product, it is important to read them carefully.'

例: If you are familiar with a product, you might not need to read the instructions in detail. However, when using a new product for the first time, it is definitely important to read the instructions carefully.

× It should be a coffee maker because I need to grab a cup of coffee every morning in order to wake me up and to clear my mind.

✓ It should be a coffee maker because I need to grab a cup of coffee every morning in order to wake myself up and to clear my mind.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is required here because the subject 'I' is performing the action on itself. Using 'me' is incorrect in this context.

× Therefore, the coffee maker is really important for me and it just like to maintain my life and to start a whole day for me.

✓ Therefore, the coffee maker is really important for me and it just helps to maintain my life and to start a whole day for me.

The phrase 'it just like to maintain' is incorrect because 'like' is a verb that does not fit here. The correct verb 'helps' should be used to express the intended meaning.

× However, I also enjoy exploring different functions on my own to learn how it works if the machine seems very complicated and make sure to read the instructions very carefully to avoid any mistakes.

✓ However, I also enjoy exploring different functions on my own to learn how it works if the machine seems very complicated and make sure I read the instructions very carefully to avoid any mistakes.

The phrase 'make sure to read' lacks a subject. Adding 'I' clarifies who should make sure to read the instructions, improving sentence clarity and correctness.

× If you are familiar with the products, I don't think you need to look into the instructions very detailed.

✓ If you are familiar with the products, I don't think you need to look into the instructions in much detail.

The adverb 'detailed' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is 'in much detail' to describe the extent of looking into instructions.

× However, if you are get in touch with the new products you have never used before, you definitely need to have a look for any.

✓ However, if you get in touch with new products you have never used before, you definitely need to have a look at them.

The phrase 'if you are get in touch' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'if you get in touch'. Also, 'have a look for any' is incomplete and unclear; 'have a look at them' is the correct expression.