Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 중복된 표현을 피하고, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 3~5문장으로 간결하게 답변하세요.

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it makes cleaning clothes much easier and faster. I enjoy using it since it saves me a lot of time and effort. Overall, it is very convenient and helps keep my clothes fresh.

提案: 답변에 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important at home because they save both time and energy. For example, using these machines allows me to finish household chores quickly and focus on other activities.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많습니다. 직접적인 답변 후 이유를 간결하고 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

例: No, I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine. I prefer to try it out first to see if I can use it easily without help.

提案: 문장이 불완전하고 어색합니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 이유를 연결어와 함께 자연스럽게 표현하세요.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions because some functions might be missed otherwise. Reading them helps me use the machine properly and avoid mistakes.

× My favorite machine in my home is washing machine because my favorite joy is washing my clothes.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the washing machine because my favorite joy is washing my clothes.

The noun 'washing machine' requires a definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item. This is an article error, but it relates to singular/plural usage as the noun is singular and needs the article to specify it.

× It is convenient to use washing machine for washing my clothes.

✓ It is convenient to use the washing machine for washing my clothes.

Again, 'washing machine' is singular and specific, so it requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping motion is the most important question in my home.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are the most important machines in my home.

The original sentence has singular/plural inconsistency and incorrect word choice. 'Washing machine' and 'sweeping motion' should be plural 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' to match the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'question' is incorrect; it should be 'machines'.

× They can save my time and my energy to do chores in my house, so they are very important.

✓ They can save my time and energy to do chores in my house, so they are very important.

The phrase 'my time and my energy' is acceptable but redundant. Removing the second 'my' is more natural. This is a minor plural/quantifier issue.

× When I first opened the box of machines, I usually use that first because I want to know how instantly I can use them.

✓ When I first opened the box of machines, I usually used that first because I wanted to know how quickly I could use them.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the action started in the past ('first opened'), the verbs 'use' and 'want' should be in past tense 'used' and 'wanted'. Also, 'how instantly' is incorrect; 'how quickly' is better.

× Yes, I do, because if I don't read the instructions. Some functions cannot be used, so I think.

✓ Yes, I do, because if I don't read the instructions, some functions cannot be used, so I think it is important.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions and clauses. The first sentence ends abruptly. It should be combined properly with commas and complete clauses.

× Rating instructions is important tasks.

✓ Reading instructions is an important task.

'Rating' is incorrect; the correct word is 'Reading'. Also, 'important tasks' should be singular 'an important task' to match the singular subject.