Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some repetitions and minor grammatical errors that affect the natural flow. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "especially after" and ensure sentence structures are correct. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is definitely the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and energy, especially after a long day. I can simply throw in the clothes, press a button, and then focus on other tasks. This convenience really makes housework less of a burden.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well, but there are minor grammatical errors such as "there are really important" instead of "they are really important." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more clearly and add a bit more specific detail to strengthen your response.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important, especially for people with busy schedules. For example, washing machines save a lot of time and effort, while robotic sweepers make housework less stressful. Overall, these machines help keep life more manageable and efficient.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using complete sentences and clearer linking words. Also, avoid short or fragmented sentences and try to explain your reasoning more fully to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I usually don't read the instructions unless the machine looks very complicated. Most of the time, I try to figure it out by pressing buttons. However, if that doesn't work, then I go back and read the manual to understand how to use it properly.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "especially for" and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, provide a bit more explanation to make your answer more complete and natural.

例: Yes, I think it's important to read the instructions, especially when you're using a machine for the first time. Doing so helps prevent mistakes and saves time. Although I don't always read them myself, I know it's a good habit to develop.

× Definitely washing machine, it saves me a lot of time and energy, especially after especially after a long day.

✓ Definitely the washing machine, it saves me a lot of time and energy, especially after a long day.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'washing machine' which is necessary when referring to a specific item. Also, the phrase 'especially after' is repeated twice, which is redundant and incorrect.

× It really makes us work, less of a burden.

✓ It really makes our work less of a burden.

The phrase 'makes us work' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is that the machine reduces the burden of work, so 'makes our work less of a burden' is the correct expression.

× Yes, there are really important, especially for people with busy schedules.

✓ Yes, they are really important, especially for people with busy schedules.

The pronoun 'there' is incorrectly used instead of 'they' to refer to washing machines and sweeping machines. 'They' is the correct subject pronoun here.

× Most of the time I try to figure it out by pressing button.

✓ Most of the time I try to figure it out by pressing a button.

The noun 'button' requires an article 'a' because it is singular and countable. Omitting the article is incorrect.

× Yes, especially for the people of especially for machines you're using for the first time.

✓ Yes, especially for people using machines for the first time.

The phrase 'especially for the people of especially for machines' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'especially for people using machines for the first time' improves clarity and correctness.