Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda təbii və aydın ifadələrdən istifadə edin, təkrarlardan qaçının və cümlələrinizi daha qısa və məntiqli edin. Məsələn, "washing machine" haqqında danışarkən, onun üstünlüklərini sadə və konkret şəkildə ifadə edin.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. It efficiently cleans clothes, making household chores easier.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha aydın və məntiqli qurun, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edin və fikirlərinizi dəstəkləyən konkret nümunələr verin. Məsələn, "washing machines and sweeping machines" haqqında danışarkən, onların həyatımızdakı əhəmiyyətini izah edin.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us complete household tasks quickly, giving us more free time to relax or pursue hobbies.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha qısa və aydın edin, fikirlərinizi daha yaxşı əlaqələndirmək üçün keçid sözlərindən istifadə edin. Məsələn, "usually" və "but" kimi sözlərlə fikirlərinizi daha məntiqli birləşdirin.

例: Usually, I don't read instructions if I have used the machine before. However, if it's my first time, I read them carefully to avoid mistakes and damage.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha aydın və qısa edin, fikirlərinizi dəstəkləmək üçün daha konkret səbəblər və nəticələr verin. Məsələn, niyə təlimatları oxumağın vacib olduğunu izah edin.

例: I think it is important to read instructions, especially if you are using a machine for the first time. This helps prevent damage and ensures you use it correctly.

× My home, my favorite machine is the washing machine because it does most of the jobs and you don't need any effort to do that. Just a simple machine can do all that hard work and it's more easier to do and it takes also waste time and it's more easier.

✓ My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it does most of the jobs and you doesn't require much effort to use. It's a simple machine that can do all the hard work, and it's easier to use and saves time.

The phrase 'more easier' is incorrect because 'easier' is already a comparative form; adding 'more' is redundant. Also, 'takes also waste time' is incorrect; it should be 'saves time' to convey the intended meaning. Additionally, 'you don't need any effort to do that' is awkward; 'you don't require much effort to use it' is clearer.

× Yes, from my perspective washing machines are sweeping. Machines are playing crucial role in our role in our life and it's one of the most. We use machines and it does most of the job in the house and you have more time to spend on yourself rather than cleaning.

✓ Yes, from my perspective, washing machines and sweeping machines play a crucial role in our lives. They do most of the jobs in the house, so you have more time to spend on yourself rather than cleaning.

The original sentence has a confusing structure and incorrect conjunction use ('washing machines are sweeping. Machines'). It should clearly connect 'washing machines and sweeping machines' as subjects. Also, 'our role in our life' is redundant and incorrect; 'our lives' is appropriate. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Usually if I have done that job, I do not need any support by the instructions. But if it's something that I haven't done or seen, usually I read the instructions because I have never seen that and it's the first experience and we need to get some knowledge about it before doing 'cause we can do wrong and it can get destroyed or.

✓ Usually, if I have done that job, I do not need any help with the instructions. But if it's something I haven't done or seen before, I usually read the instructions because it's my first experience and I need to gain some knowledge about it before doing it, as I could do it wrong and it might get damaged.

The phrase 'support by the instructions' is incorrect; 'help with the instructions' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'get destroyed or' is incomplete and awkward; 'might get damaged' is clearer. The sentence was rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From my perspective, if you haven't done it before, so I think that first at first you need to read the instruction to have more information about it and know how to correctly use it. Because some people without reading instructions, they're destroying or doing it worse. So it results distraction.

✓ From my perspective, if you haven't done it before, I think that first you need to read the instructions to get more information about it and know how to use it correctly. Some people, without reading instructions, end up damaging it or using it incorrectly, which causes problems.

The original sentence has redundant conjunctions ('if... so'), incorrect pronoun use ('they're destroying or doing it worse'), and singular/plural inconsistency ('instruction' should be 'instructions'). The corrected version uses appropriate pronouns and plural forms, and clarifies the meaning.