Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 'Whopper maker'와 'waffle maker'가 혼용되어 혼란을 줄 수 있습니다. 또한, 추가적인 세부 설명이 더 구체적이면 좋겠습니다. 예를 들어, 왜 이 기계를 좋아하는지, 어떤 점이 특별한지 구체적으로 설명해 보세요.

例: My favorite machine at home is my waffle maker, which I recently bought. It’s very convenient because I can quickly turn leftover food from the freezer into warm, delicious waffle-shaped snacks. This saves me time and reduces food waste, which I really appreciate.

提案: 답변이 명확하고 관련된 이유를 잘 제시했으나, 연결어 사용이 부족해 문장 간 흐름이 다소 단절된 느낌입니다. 'because', 'therefore' 같은 연결어를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 연결해 보세요.

例: Absolutely yes, because washing machines and sweeping machines make it much easier to manage my house and busy daily life. Therefore, they help me catch up on laundry and keep my house clean with less effort. It would be very frustrating if they broke down.

提案: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법적 오류가 있습니다('simple size of the machine' 등). 또한, 문장 구조가 명확하지 않아 이해하기 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하고 정확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: To be honest, I usually don't read the instructions because most washing machines are similar and easy to use. I can operate them by looking at the basic controls. I only refer to the user manual when something goes wrong.

提案: 답변이 명확하고 이유도 잘 제시했으나, 문장 연결이 조금 더 자연스러워질 수 있습니다. 'because', 'so', 'also' 등의 연결어를 적절히 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화해 보세요.

例: Definitely yes, I think reading instructions is important because it helps me use machines properly. However, I sometimes find user manuals difficult to understand, so I usually search for related information on the Internet. Also, if I want to know more, I contact the product service center directly.

× Any leftover food can be taken out of the freezer and put in the waffle maker, turning it into a warm waffle shaped snack.

✓ Any leftover food can be taken out of the freezer and put in the waffle maker, which turns it into a warm waffle-shaped snack.

The original sentence uses a participle phrase 'turning it into...' which is acceptable but can cause ambiguity. Using 'which turns it into...' clarifies the subject performing the action. Also, 'waffle shaped' should be hyphenated as 'waffle-shaped' because it is a compound adjective modifying 'snack'. 이 문장은 '-ing' 형태의 분사구문을 사용했으나, 주어가 명확하지 않아 의미가 모호할 수 있습니다. 'which turns'를 사용하여 주어를 명확히 하고, 'waffle-shaped'는 복합 형용사이므로 하이픈으로 연결해야 합니다.

× Most washing machines are similar and simple to use what I mean.

✓ Most washing machines are similar and simple to use, I mean.

The phrase 'what I mean' is incorrectly used here. The correct expression is 'I mean' to clarify or emphasize the previous statement. 'What I mean' is typically used in a different sentence structure. 'what I mean'은 이 문맥에서 부적절하게 사용되었습니다. 올바른 표현은 'I mean'으로, 앞 문장을 명확히 하거나 강조할 때 사용합니다.

× Instead I can easily operate them by looking at the simple size of the machine.

✓ Instead, I can easily operate them by looking at the simple size of the machine.

A comma is needed after 'Instead' when it is used as an introductory adverb to separate it from the main clause. 'Instead'가 문두에 올 때는 쉼표를 사용하여 주절과 구분해야 합니다.

× I only look for the user manual and ready when something breaks down.

✓ I only look for the user manual and get ready when something breaks down.

The phrase 'and ready' is incomplete and incorrect. The verb 'get' is needed before 'ready' to form the correct phrase 'get ready'. 'and ready'는 불완전한 표현으로, 'get ready'라는 동사구가 필요합니다.