Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói rõ lý do tại sao máy giặt là máy yêu thích và mô tả cụ thể hơn về lợi ích của nó.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. Washing clothes by hand can be very tiring, especially when there are many clothes. Therefore, using the washing machine makes the task much easier and quicker.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ quan điểm của bạn.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they make household chores easier. However, some families may prefer doing these tasks manually. Nevertheless, having these machines is more convenient and saves time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề và liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn, đồng thời tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn đọc hướng dẫn.

例: Absolutely yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it properly. Machines often have various buttons, so reading the instructions ensures I press the right ones to make it work.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và diễn đạt cụ thể hơn về tầm quan trọng của việc đọc hướng dẫn sử dụng máy móc.

例: Of course, it is very important to read the instructions because some machines are quite complex. By reading the instructions, you can understand the functions of different buttons and operate the machine easily.

× For me in my home, my favorite machines is a washing machine because when I wash the clothes by my hand, it is very tired because of the number a big number of the clothes.

✓ For me in my home, my favorite machine is a washing machine because when I wash the clothes by hand, it is very tiring because of the large number of clothes.

The subject 'machines' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular, causing a subject-verb agreement error. Also, 'a big number of the clothes' is incorrect; it should be 'a large number of clothes'. 'By my hand' is unnatural; 'by hand' is the correct phrase. 'It is very tired' should be 'it is very tiring' because the washing is causing tiredness, not the hand itself being tired.

× So I will use the washing machine because it is easy to wash and it's quickly.

✓ So I will use the washing machine because it is easy to wash and it works quickly.

The word 'quickly' is an adverb and should modify a verb. 'It's quickly' is incorrect because 'quickly' cannot be used as an adjective. The correct phrase is 'it works quickly' or 'it is quick'.

× Of course yes, but to be to say that they are important.

✓ Of course yes, I would say that they are important.

The phrase 'but to be to say' is incorrect and confusing. The correct conjunction to express affirmation is 'I would say' or simply 'I think'. 'But' is unnecessary here.

× So I think you can need or don't need because with a some family they don't need to use these machines and they will do it by their hand.

✓ So I think you may need or may not need them because some families don't need to use these machines and they do it by hand.

'You can need or don't need' is incorrect modal verb usage; 'may need or may not need' is better. 'With a some family' is incorrect; it should be 'some families'. 'Do it by their hand' should be 'do it by hand'.

× So if you have it, it is more convenient.

✓ So if you have them, it is more convenient.

Referring to 'machines' which is plural, the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× Absolutely yes. I always read the instructions before using a machine because it is very important to read them.

✓ Absolutely yes. I always read the instructions before using a machine because it is very important to do so.

The phrase 'important to read them' is acceptable but 'important to do so' is more natural and avoids repetition.

× Some the machine it will have some button or button so you need to read so you can know that what button that you have to click on and it will trigger.

✓ Some machines have some buttons, so you need to read to know which button you have to click on and it will trigger the function.

'Some the machine' is incorrect; it should be 'some machines'. 'Some button or button' is repetitive; 'some buttons' is correct. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× Of of course yes, it is very important to read the instructions because some machines it has a complex.

✓ Of course yes, it is very important to read the instructions because some machines are complex.

'Of of course yes' has a repeated word. 'Some machines it has a complex' is incorrect; 'some machines are complex' is correct.

× It is very complex though, you have to read the instruction to know where is the bottom and also that you can trigger easily the machines.

✓ They are very complex though; you have to read the instructions to know where the buttons are and also so that you can easily operate the machines.

'It is very complex' refers to machines (plural), so 'They are very complex' is correct. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Where is the bottom' is incorrect; it should be 'where the buttons are'. 'Trigger easily the machines' is awkward; 'easily operate the machines' is better.