Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 전반적으로 자연스럽고 내용을 잘 전달하고 있으나, 'appreciator'라는 단어 사용이 부적절하며, 문장 구조와 어휘 선택에서 약간의 오류가 있습니다. 또한, 'for the long time' 대신 'for a long time'이 더 자연스럽습니다. 좀 더 정확한 단어 선택과 문법에 주의하면 좋겠습니다.

例: My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it keeps food fresh and cool for a long time. Since I often buy more food than I can eat at once, the refrigerator helps me avoid wasting it. Thanks to this machine, I can enjoy fresh meals every day without worrying about spoilage.

提案: 답변이 명확하고 구체적인 예시를 포함하고 있어 좋습니다. 다만, 'other task scale'라는 표현이 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 좀 더 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸고, 연결어 사용을 조금 더 다양하게 하면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for household chores because they save a lot of time and effort. For instance, a sweeping machine can clean the floor quickly and thoroughly, making the room safer and more comfortable. Additionally, washing machines allow me to do laundry easily with just one button, so I can focus on other tasks.

提案: 답변이 주제를 잘 이해하고 있으나, 마지막 문장이 미완성되어 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 좀 더 구체적인 내용을 추가하면 답변이 더 효과적일 것입니다.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine. Although it can be a bit tedious, reading the manual helps me understand how to operate the machine correctly and avoid any damage. For example, if I don't fully understand the instructions, the machine might break easily, which would shorten its lifespan.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문장 구조가 부자연스럽습니다. 'People using any machine' 부분이 문법적으로 맞지 않으며, 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 재구성할 필요가 있습니다. 또한, 좀 더 구체적인 이유나 예시를 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine. Although reading the manual can be time-consuming, it helps me understand how to operate the machine properly and avoid potential damage.

× My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it keeps food fresh and cool for the long time.

✓ My favorite machine at home is the refrigerator because it keeps food fresh and cool for a long time.

'the long time' is incorrect here because 'long time' is an indefinite duration and should not have the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'a long time'.

× Since I often buy more food than I can eat at once, the appreciator helps me avoid wasting it.

✓ Since I often buy more food than I can eat at once, the refrigerator helps me avoid wasting it.

The word 'appreciator' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'refrigerator'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error, but it affects sentence clarity.

× Thanks to this machine, I can enjoy fresh meal every day without worrying about spoilage.

✓ Thanks to this machine, I can enjoy fresh meals every day without worrying about spoilage.

'fresh meal' should be plural 'fresh meals' because it refers to meals in general, not a single meal. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Also, washing machines allow me to do laundry easily with just one button so I can focus on the other task scale.

✓ Also, washing machines allow me to do laundry easily with just one button so I can focus on other tasks.

'the other task scale' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'other tasks' to correctly refer to additional tasks. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and noun phrases.

× For example, if I don't fully understand the instructions, the machine might break easily, which would shorten.

✓ For example, if I don't fully understand the instructions, the machine might break easily, which would shorten its lifespan.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'which would shorten.' It needs an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'its lifespan' clarifies what would be shortened.

× People using any machine, although it can be a bit time consuming with the manual, helps me understand how to operate the machine properly and prevent any potential damage.

✓ Using any machine, although it can be a bit time-consuming, reading the manual helps me understand how to operate the machine properly and prevent any potential damage.

The original sentence is confusing and structurally incorrect. The subject 'People using any machine' does not agree with the verb 'helps'. Rewriting the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.