Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构的清晰，避免冗长和重复。

例: My favourite machine at home is my cell phone because it saves me a lot of time when I work and brings me joy when I relax. Additionally, it allows me to easily chat with my friends online.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，逻辑混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议明确表达观点，使用恰当词汇，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time and effort in household chores. Without them, cleaning would be tiring and time-consuming.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达，注意主谓一致，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using a machine because it helps me understand its functions and ensures it works efficiently.

提案: 回答表达不清，逻辑不连贯，语法错误较多。建议理清思路，使用正确的连接词和句式，避免重复。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because understanding how a machine works can prevent damage. For example, if you misuse a washing machine without knowing its functions, it might break down.

× Well, I like cell phones because it can spare many time for me when I was working and gave me happiness when I was relaxing and then I got much chance to chat with my friends online.

✓ Well, I like cell phones because they can save a lot of time for me when I am working and give me happiness when I am relaxing, and then I get many chances to chat with my friends online.

这里“cell phones”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“they can”而不是“it can”。另外，“many time”应改为“a lot of time”或“much time”，更符合英语习惯。时态也需统一，描述习惯性动作用现在时。

× Well, I think it is important because doing choices is a hard work.

✓ Well, I think it is important because making choices is hard work.

“doing choices”表达不正确，正确表达应为“making choices”。“hard work”是不可数名词，前面不加冠词“a”。

× Well, I think it is important because doing choices is a hard work. It takes you a lot of time and needs a lot of process to finish it, so it makes you retire after you finish it.

✓ Well, I think it is important because making choices is hard work. It takes a lot of time and requires many steps to finish, so it makes you tired after you finish it.

“needs a lot of process”表达不自然，应改为“requires many steps”。“makes you retire”用词错误，应为“makes you tired”。

× So if there's a substitute of these things, I'll feel much happier about it.

✓ So if there is a substitute for these things, I'll feel much happier about it.

“substitute of”应改为“substitute for”，介词使用错误。

× Well, because if you want to make your machine work work well in home, it is very important to read the instructions seriously and know the function of the machine.

✓ Well, if you want to make your machine work well at home, it is very important to read the instructions carefully and understand the functions of the machine.

“work work”重复，应删去一个。“in home”应为“at home”。“read the instructions seriously”表达不自然，应为“read the instructions carefully”。“know the function”应为“understand the functions”，且“function”应为复数。

× It can improve the efficiency of it and makes the quality better when they are working.

✓ It can improve its efficiency and make the quality better when it is working.

“improve the efficiency of it”应改为“improve its efficiency”，避免重复。“makes”应改为“make”，与主语“it”保持一致。代词“they”指代不明，应改为“it”。

× Although it is a first step for using instruction, but I think it is very important for us to take it seriously because if you can't get the function of the machine, you can make it work well.

✓ Although it is the first step to using instructions, I think it is very important for us to take it seriously because if you don't understand the function of the machine, you cannot make it work well.

“Although...but”结构重复，应去掉“but”。“a first step”应为“the first step”。“using instruction”应为“using instructions”。“can't get the function”表达不准确，应为“don't understand the function”。

× For example, if you can make the function of a washing machine, it may makes it broken in the future.

✓ For example, if you don't understand the function of a washing machine, it may get broken in the future.

“can make the function”表达错误，应为“don't understand the function”。“may makes”动词形式错误，应为“may get”。“makes it broken”表达不自然，应为“get broken”。