Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time and effort. Since laundry is a daily chore, having this machine makes my life easier. Moreover, modern washing machines have various settings that help clean clothes efficiently. Therefore, I find it very useful in my routine.

提案: Your answer has some pronunciation and word choice errors (e.g., 'sweating' instead of 'sweeping'). Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons. Keep your sentences clear and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life. They save time and reduce physical effort, especially in busy cities like Delhi. Without these machines, household chores would be much more difficult. Therefore, I rely on them heavily to manage my routine efficiently.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using better linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'manage the machine step' and be more specific about the consequences.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it properly. Otherwise, incorrect usage might damage the machine or reduce its efficiency. Therefore, reading the manual ensures safe and effective use.

提案: Your answer is good but can be made more natural by simplifying sentence structure and using appropriate linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'hamper the service that we are going to take from it'.

例: Yes, reading instructions is important before using any machine. If we do not follow the manual, the machine might get damaged or not work properly. Therefore, instructions help us use devices safely and maintain their performance.

× The more is 2 favorite machine in my home is the washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the washing machine.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'more is 2 favorite machine' which is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The correct singular form 'My favorite machine' should be used to clearly express the idea.

× With the advancement of technology, washing machines are available in each and every home that makes the life easier to wash the clothes.

✓ With the advancement of technology, washing machines are available in every home, which makes life easier when washing clothes.

The phrase 'in each and every home that makes the life easier to wash the clothes' is awkward and incorrect. 'In every home' is sufficient, and 'which makes life easier when washing clothes' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× I think laundry is the biggest hurdle in my daily routine that cost a lot of effort and with this modern technology, one's life has become easier and the laundry can problem can be solved with.

✓ I think laundry is the biggest hurdle in my daily routine that costs a lot of effort, and with this modern technology, one's life has become easier and the laundry problem can be solved.

The verb 'cost' should be 'costs' to agree with singular subject 'laundry'. Also, 'laundry can problem can be solved with' is incorrect; it should be 'laundry problem can be solved'. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Yes, I think washing machine or sweating machines are an integral part of the Delhi routine because it makes a life much more easier.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines or sweeping machines are an integral part of the daily routine because they make life much easier.

The singular 'washing machine' conflicts with plural 'sweating machines' (which should be 'sweeping machines'). Also, 'Delhi routine' is likely a typo for 'daily routine'. 'It makes a life much more easier' is incorrect; 'they make life much easier' is correct subject-verb agreement and expression.

× I am totally dependent on the modern technology usage because this busy life is having so much trouble in me.

✓ I am totally dependent on modern technology because this busy life causes me a lot of trouble.

'Dependent on the modern technology usage' is awkward; 'dependent on modern technology' is better. 'This busy life is having so much trouble in me' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'this busy life causes me a lot of trouble'.

× Yes, I do read the instructions before using a machine because it is very important step.

✓ Yes, I do read the instructions before using a machine because it is a very important step.

The article 'a' is missing before 'very important step'. The phrase should be 'a very important step' to be grammatically correct.

× If we ever forget to manage the machine step, it might break or it might make the machine usage difficult.

✓ If we ever forget to follow the machine's steps, it might break or make using the machine difficult.

'Forget to manage the machine step' is incorrect; 'forget to follow the machine's steps' is correct. Also, 'make the machine usage difficult' is awkward; 'make using the machine difficult' is better.

× Yes, it is important to read the instructions before operating any kind of machine because if we will not operate it accordingly with the instructions given in the manual, it might break the device or it may hamper the service that we are going to take from it.

✓ Yes, it is important to read the instructions before operating any kind of machine because if we do not operate it according to the instructions given in the manual, it might break the device or affect the service we receive from it.

'If we will not operate it accordingly with the instructions' is incorrect; the correct form is 'if we do not operate it according to the instructions'. Also, 'may hamper the service that we are going to take from it' is awkward; 'affect the service we receive from it' is clearer and correct.