Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a concise, clear response within 5 sentences.

例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because it keeps all my favourite food items fresh, such as chocolates and ice creams. It helps me store food safely and saves time by preserving leftovers. Therefore, I find it very useful and important in daily life.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy, for example, use singular or plural forms correctly. Also, use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect your ideas clearly and avoid filler words to sound more fluent.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines like vacuum cleaners are very important because they make household chores easier and save a lot of time. For example, washing machines can also dry clothes, which helps save energy and effort.

提案: Avoid excessive filler words and try to use more precise vocabulary. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'as' to explain reasons clearly and make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because it makes the operation easier and more efficient. It also helps prevent any damage to the appliance.

提案: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Avoid repeating ideas and filler words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to make your answer more logical and concise.

例: Yes, it is very important to read the instructions because it ensures the machine works smoothly and prevents damage. Therefore, reading instructions saves time and protects the appliance from breakage.

× It's definitely a washing machines and the sweeping machines like vacuum cleaners are really important.

✓ It's definitely the washing machine and the sweeping machines like vacuum cleaners that are really important.

The phrase 'a washing machines' incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms. 'A' should be followed by a singular noun, so it should be 'a washing machine' or 'the washing machine' to refer to the machine in general. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'that are' to connect the subject and predicate clearly.

× So yes, I think, uh, refrigerator would be my favorite machine.

✓ So yes, I think, uh, the refrigerator would be my favorite machine.

When referring to a specific object known to both speaker and listener, the definite article 'the' should be used before 'refrigerator'. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect because it refers to a particular machine in the home.

× I like to keep all my favorite things in my refrigerator.

✓ I like to keep all my favorite things in the refrigerator.

When talking about a specific appliance in one's home, 'the' is used instead of 'my' to indicate the particular item. Using 'the refrigerator' is more natural and grammatically correct in this context.

× All the food, my favorite food items are kept in the refrigerator like chocolates, ice creams.

✓ All the food, my favorite food items, are kept in the refrigerator, like chocolates and ice cream.

The phrase 'ice creams' is usually uncountable when referring to the food in general, so 'ice cream' is correct. Also, commas are added for clarity. The definite article 'the' before 'refrigerator' is correct here.

× It also, umm, saves us from any risk of uh, breakage of the instrument or the appliance.

✓ It also, umm, saves us from any risk of breakage of the instrument or appliance.

The definite article 'the' before 'instrument' and 'appliance' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× So yes, I think it is important to read the instruction for using any plan.

✓ So yes, I think it is important to read the instructions for using any plan.

The word 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to guidelines or directions. Also, 'plan' seems to be a typo or incorrect word; it should likely be 'appliance' or 'machine' depending on context. However, as per instructions, only grammar issues are corrected here.