Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류(예: 'reduce' 대신 'reduces')와 문장 연결이 부족합니다. 문장 간 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 더 논리적이고 풍부하게 만드세요.

例: My favorite home appliance is a robot vacuum cleaner because it reduces the time I spend cleaning. Moreover, it keeps my home cleaner than ever, which makes my daily life more comfortable.

提案: 답변이 질문에 직접 답하고 있으나, 문법 오류('to cleaning' → 'to clean')와 문장 연결이 어색합니다. 연결어를 활용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고 구체적인 이유를 추가하세요.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in modern life because many people live apart from their families. Therefore, they don't have much time to clean, so these appliances help them save time and effort.

提案: 문법 오류('instruction' → 'instructions', 'a new machines' → 'new machines')와 문장 구조가 부자연스럽습니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드세요.

例: No, I don't usually read the instructions before using new machines because many companies now provide QR codes and instruction videos. As a result, I find it easier to watch videos than to read manuals.

提案: 문법 오류('instruction' → 'instructions', 'direct directions' → 'correct directions', 'function' → 'functions')와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 연결어를 활용해 문장을 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 만드세요.

例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions because by doing so, people can get correct directions. Moreover, they can learn how to use a variety of functions effectively.

× Well my favorite home appliance is a robot vacuum cleaner. This is because it reduce the time that I spend in cleaning.

✓ Well my favorite home appliance is a robot vacuum cleaner. This is because it reduces the time that I spend cleaning.

The verb 'reduce' should be in the third person singular form 'reduces' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'in cleaning' is incorrect; the gerund 'cleaning' should be used without the preposition 'in'.

× This is because it reduce the time that I spend in cleaning.

✓ This is because it reduces the time that I spend cleaning.

The preposition 'in' before 'cleaning' is unnecessary and incorrect. The verb 'spend' is directly followed by the gerund form without a preposition.

× Also my home is cleaner than ever.

✓ Also, my home is cleaner than ever.

A comma is needed after 'Also' to separate the introductory word from the main clause for clarity.

× Yes, I believe those two home appliances are really important in modern life. This is because nowadays many people live apart from their family so they don't have much time to cleaning so it helped them.

✓ Yes, I believe those two home appliances are really important in modern life. This is because nowadays many people live apart from their family so they don't have much time to clean, so it helps them.

The phrase 'time to cleaning' is incorrect; it should be 'time to clean' using the base form after 'to'. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to maintain present tense consistency.

× ...so it helped them.

✓ ...so it helps them.

The verb 'helped' is in past tense, but the context requires present tense 'helps' to match the ongoing situation.

× No, I don't read instruction before using a new machines.

✓ No, I don't read instructions before using new machines.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple guidelines. Also, 'a new machines' is incorrect; 'machines' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'.

× No, I don't read instruction before using a new machines.

✓ No, I don't read instructions before using new machines.

The noun 'machines' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.

× No, I don't read instruction before using a new machines.

✓ No, I don't read instructions before using new machines.

No preposition is needed between 'read' and 'instructions'.

× This is because many companies provide QR code and instruction videos, so I don't have to read instructions compared to the past.

✓ This is because many companies provide QR codes and instruction videos, so I don't have to read instructions compared to the past.

'QR code' should be plural 'QR codes' to agree with 'many companies' providing multiple codes.

× Yes, I believe it is really important to read the instruction.

✓ Yes, I believe it is really important to read the instructions.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple guidelines.

× By reading in the instruction, people can gain correct direct directions.

✓ By reading the instructions, people can gain correct direct directions.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary and incorrect before 'the instruction'. The phrase should be 'By reading the instructions'.

× Moreover, they can use a variety of function.

✓ Moreover, they can use a variety of functions.

'Function' should be plural 'functions' after 'a variety of' because it refers to multiple features.