Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不完整，且有语法错误，导致表达不够清晰。建议注意句子完整性，避免句子中断，使用连贯的句子表达完整的意思。

例: My favorite machine at home is the air conditioner because I live in the southern region where it is warm and hot most of the year. Therefore, the air conditioner helps me stay comfortable indoors.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并使用恰当的连接词使句子连贯。

例: I believe washing machines are very important because we need to wash clothes regularly. However, sweeping machines are not necessary in my house since I prefer to sweep manually.

提案: 回答不完整且含糊，缺乏连贯性。建议直接回答问题，使用完整句子，并说明具体情况。

例: I usually read the instructions before using a new machine. However, for simple machines like the washing machine, I don't read the manual because it's easy to operate.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子不完整且缺乏具体细节。建议使用完整句子，补充具体原因和例子，使回答更丰富。

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions regardless of the device's complexity. For complicated machines, instructions help avoid mistakes, and for simple ones, they can be useful if problems occur.

× I think the washing machine is really important for every people

✓ I think the washing machine is really important for every person

这里的 'people' 是复数形式，表示多个人，而 'every' 后面应该接单数名词，表示每一个人。因此应将 'people' 改为单数 'person'。

× whereas they sweeping the sweeping machine is not necessary in my house.

✓ whereas sweeping the floor with a sweeping machine is not necessary in my house.

句中 'they sweeping the sweeping machine' 结构不正确，'they' 与动词形式不匹配，且表达不清晰。应改为 'sweeping the floor with a sweeping machine'，使句子语法正确且表达明确。

× so without the air.

✓ so without the air conditioner, it would be very uncomfortable.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，导致表达不清晰。应补充完整句子，使其表达完整。

× We need to clean our we need to wash our clothes every day so.

✓ We need to wash our clothes every day.

句子中出现重复且不完整的表达，导致语义混乱。应删除多余部分，保持句子简洁明了。

× I will read the instruction, but such as the washing machine, this is very simple, so I will never read it.

✓ I will read the instructions, but for something like the washing machine, which is very simple, I will never read them.

'instruction' 应为复数形式 'instructions'，且指代不明确，需调整句子结构使表达更自然。

× Yes, I think it's necessary to read the instruction no matter the device is complicated or simple.

✓ Yes, I think it's necessary to read the instructions no matter whether the device is complicated or simple.

'instruction' 应为复数形式 'instructions'，且句子缺少连接词 'whether'，使句子更完整。

× If the machine is very difficult to operate, you can read instruction. As for the simple machine, if you encounter the problems, you can also.

✓ If the machine is very difficult to operate, you can read the instructions. As for simple machines, if you encounter problems, you can also read them.

句子缺少冠词 'the' 和复数形式 'instructions'，且最后一句不完整，需补充完整表达。