Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议明确指出机器名称（如空气炸锅），并简洁描述其功能，避免语法错误和冗余。

例: My favorite machine at home is the air fryer. It cooks food with little oil, making it healthier and crispy. Besides frying, it can also bake and grill, which makes it very versatile.

提案: 表达有语法错误，词汇使用不当，且句子不连贯。建议使用正确的语法结构，丰富词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. Nowadays, many families are busy, so these machines help save time. Moreover, they keep the home clean and comfortable when you return.

提案: 回答不完整且含糊，语法错误较多。建议明确表达阅读说明书的重要性，并用完整句子说明原因。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me avoid mistakes and ensures I use the machine safely and correctly.

提案: 表达不够自然，语法和用词错误较多。建议用更自然的表达方式说明阅读说明书的重要性，并举例说明。

例: I think reading the instructions is very important because it helps you understand how to use the machine properly. It also protects the machine from damage caused by incorrect use.

× My favorite machine is air coconut, it can fly some of the fruit without as too much oil is heavy and the food becomes crunchy and also they have different functions we can use it for cooking.

✓ My favorite machine is an air fryer. It can fry some fruits without using too much oil, which is heavy, and the food becomes crunchy. Also, it has different functions we can use for cooking.

原句中“air coconut”应为“air fryer”，且“some of the fruit”应为“some fruits”，复数形式更合适。句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子以表达清晰。建议使用正确的单复数形式，并注意句子连贯。

× I think it's important because nowadays so many family is very busy and those machines can help them save the time.

✓ I think it's important because nowadays so many families are very busy and those machines can help them save time.

“family”应使用复数形式“families”，因为指多个家庭；“is”应改为“are”以符合复数主语。去掉“the”在“save time”中更自然。

× Also it's very handy that you can see the home become queen and when you come back.

✓ Also, it's very handy that you can see the home become clean when you come back.

“become queen”应为“become clean”，原词拼写错误且语义不符。

× Yes, I think the instructions can avoid that.

✓ Yes, I think the instructions can help avoid that.

“instructions can avoid that”表达不准确，应为“instructions can help avoid that”，增加“help”使句子更自然。

× although would not book the machine.

✓ although I would not break the machine.

“book the machine”用词错误，应为“break the machine”，表示不会损坏机器。

× After reading the instructions is very important because it can avoid you don't know how to use and use it in the wrong way.

✓ Reading the instructions is very important because it can prevent you from not knowing how to use the machine and using it in the wrong way.

句子结构混乱，“After reading the instructions is very important”不合语法，应改为“Reading the instructions is very important”。“avoid you don't know”表达错误，应改为“prevent you from not knowing”。

× Also protect the machines with the introduction.

✓ Also, it protects the machines by following the instructions.

“with the introduction”用词错误，应为“by following the instructions”，表示通过遵循说明来保护机器。