Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'saves my lot of time and energy since I am having two kids so it's so useful for me while I can do other job,' you could say 'because it saves me a lot of time and energy, especially since I have two kids, allowing me to do other tasks.'

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and energy. Since I have two kids, it is very useful as it allows me to focus on other tasks while the clothes are being washed.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid vague phrases like 'as well as it' and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. They save a lot of time and effort, which allows people to spend more quality time with their friends and family. This is especially helpful nowadays when many people work from home and need to manage their household chores efficiently.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, instead of 'I I have all little knowledge,' say 'I have some knowledge.' Also, clarify your points about troubleshooting.

例: Yes, I always try to read the instructions before using any machine. This helps me understand how to operate it properly and what to do if something goes wrong. Therefore, I make sure to read the full instructions carefully.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Make sure to finish your sentences and use correct grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. For example, 'Reading instructions is important because it helps prevent breakdowns and ensures safe use.'

例: Yes, I believe it is important to read the instructions because they provide guidance on how to use the machine safely and prevent breakdowns. Therefore, people should always read the guidebook before operating any new device.

× My favorite machine is the washing machine which is quite important for me because it saves my lot of time and energy since I am having two kids so it's so useful for me while I can do other job.

✓ My favorite machine is the washing machine which is quite important for me because it saves me a lot of time and energy since I have two kids, so it's very useful for me while I can do other jobs.

The phrase 'my lot of time' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'a lot of time'. Also, 'I am having two kids' should be 'I have two kids' because 'have' is a stative verb and not used in continuous form. Additionally, 'other job' should be plural 'other jobs' to match the context.

× Yes, they both are quite important for the people so that they can spend their time with their friends and family as well as it.

✓ Yes, they both are quite important for people so that they can spend their time with their friends and family as well as it.

The phrase 'for the people' is incorrect here; 'for people' is more natural and general. Also, 'as well as it' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be omitted or clarified.

× It can also save a lot of time and efforts because nowadays people are are working from their home so definitely they can do any other.

✓ It can also save a lot of time and effort because nowadays people are working from home, so definitely they can do other things.

The phrase 'time and efforts' should be 'time and effort' as 'effort' is uncountable here. The repeated word 'are are' is a typo. 'From their home' should be 'from home' for natural expression. The phrase 'do any other' is incomplete and should be 'do other things'.

× Yes, I always try to read the instruction before I use any machine so that I I have all little knowledge about what to do and if things got wrong then I what should I have to try.

✓ Yes, I always try to read the instructions before I use any machine so that I have at least some knowledge about what to do and if things go wrong then I know what I should try.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. 'All little knowledge' is incorrect; 'at least some knowledge' is appropriate. 'If things got wrong' should be 'if things go wrong' to match present tense. The phrase 'I what should I have to try' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'I know what I should try'.

× Yes, I think it's always important to read the instructions so that you have a idea about what to do and it also safe to breakdown in the future.

✓ Yes, I think it's always important to read the instructions so that you have an idea about what to do and it is also safe from breakdown in the future.

'A idea' should be 'an idea' because 'idea' starts with a vowel sound. 'It also safe to breakdown' is incorrect; it should be 'it is also safe from breakdown' to convey safety against malfunction.

× So definitely people should try to read the guidebook with the.

✓ So definitely, people should try to read the guidebook carefully.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'with the' which is incomplete. Adding 'carefully' completes the sentence meaningfully.