Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点并给出了理由，但句子较长且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

例: My favourite machine at home is the air fryer because it cooks food quickly and makes it crispy. It saves me time after a busy day and helps me enjoy tasty meals easily.

提案: 回答中出现了不明确的代词“he”，且口语填充词较多，影响表达清晰度。建议直接表达观点，减少口语填充词，句子更简洁。

例: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important nowadays because they save a lot of time and effort. Doing laundry and cleaning by hand can be exhausting and slow.

提案: 回答表达了观点和原因，但部分表达不够地道，如“know deeply”和“prevent me from safety issues”。建议使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. Even if I am familiar with it, reading the manual helps me avoid accidents and use the machine properly.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不自然的问题，如“contemplating about”和“read the instructions like straightly”。建议使用更准确和自然的表达。

例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is important because it saves time and effort. It also helps ensure that you use the machine safely and correctly.

× Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machines, I would still read it because I think reading the instruction can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

✓ Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machine, I would still read it because I think reading the instructions can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

“this kind of machines”中“machines”应为单数“machine”，因为“this kind of”后面通常接单数名词；“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，因为通常指多条说明。

× He also believed that washing machines and sweeping machines are getting increasing importance in the, you know, bustling modern world because it saves people so much time and energy in doing laundries and sweeping manually can be really tiring and time consuming.

✓ He also believed that washing machines and sweeping machines are getting increasing importance in the, you know, bustling modern world because they save people so much time and energy; doing laundry and sweeping manually can be really tiring and time consuming.

“it saves people”中的“it”指代不明，应改为“they”指代复数的洗衣机和扫地机；“in doing laundries”中“in doing”用法不当，改为“doing laundry”更自然且“laundry”不可数。

× Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machines, I would still read it because I think reading the instruction can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

✓ Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machine, I would still read them because I think reading the instructions can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

“read it”中的“it”指代不明确，因“instructions”是复数，应使用“them”。

× I think instead of contemplating about how to use the machine by yourself, it's more convenient and actually more effective to read the instructions like straightly so that it can save your time and energy and also ensure safety.

✓ I think instead of contemplating how to use the machine by yourself, it's more convenient and actually more effective to read the instructions directly so that it can save your time and energy and also ensure safety.

“contemplating about”中“about”多余，应去掉；“like straightly”表达不自然，应改为“directly”。

× Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machines, I would still read it because I think reading the instruction can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

✓ Even if I already know deeply how to operate this kind of machine, I would still read it because I think reading the instructions can prevent me from safety issues and ensure that I use this correctly.

“this kind of machines”应为“this kind of machine”，因为“this kind of”后接单数名词；“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，因为通常指多条说明。