Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和口语填充词，句子结构不完整，建议减少口语化表达，使用完整句子，并且增加具体细节使回答更丰富。

例: My favourite machine at home is the television because it helps me relax after a long day. I enjoy lying on the sofa and watching various programs, which entertains me and helps me unwind.

提案: 回答中有口语填充词，表达稍显重复，建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us complete household chores quickly and efficiently. As a result, we can save time and energy to enjoy our leisure activities.

提案: 回答中有较多口语填充词，句子结构不够清晰，建议简化表达，避免重复，并且使用更准确的词汇和完整句子。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using certain machines, such as the microwave. This is important because improper use can lead to accidents, so reading the manual helps me use the machine safely.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，存在语法错误和重复，建议组织清晰的句子，完整表达观点，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they provide useful information and tips on how to use a machine properly. Without reading them, we might misuse the machine and cause damage or accidents.

× My favorite machine is television.

✓ My favorite machine is the television.

这里缺少定冠词“the”，因为特指家中的电视机。电视机是单数名词，前面需要加定冠词。

× I like to, you know, just lying on the sofa and watching the television all day without any.

✓ I like to, you know, just lie on the sofa and watch the television all day without any interruption.

动词“like to”后面应接动词原形“lie”和“watch”，而不是动名词“lying”和“watching”。

× they are a very useful tool to do some laundry

✓ they are very useful tools to do some laundry

主语是复数“they”，谓语后应使用复数名词“tools”，而不是单数“tool”。

× And it's really pretty efficient and can, you know, save a lot of time for us to do our leisure activities.

✓ And it's really pretty efficient and can, you know, save a lot of time for us to do our leisure activities.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× some machines are pretty hard to, you know to some machines you must lead to read the instruction before you use it, like the microwave.

✓ Some machines are pretty hard to use, you know. For some machines, you must read the instructions before you use them, like the microwave.

原句结构混乱，缺少连贯性。应拆分为两句，且“lead to read”用法错误，应改为“must read”。

× If you don't use the instruction properly, it may cause some accident in the kitchen.

✓ If you don't use the instructions properly, it may cause some accidents in the kitchen.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，且“some accident”应为复数“some accidents”。

× So I will read the instruction before I use that.

✓ So I will read the instructions before I use it.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，且“that”指代不明确，应改为“it”。

× And if you sure that's really important, instruction provides a lot of information for us to get to know how to use a machine or also provide a lot of useful tips and help us to use that properly.

✓ And yes, that's really important. Instructions provide a lot of information for us to learn how to use a machine, and also provide many useful tips to help us use it properly.

原句结构不完整且语法错误，缺少动词“are”，且“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，句子应拆分并调整顺序。

× If you don't read the instruction, firstly, it may call.

✓ If you don't read the instructions, firstly, it may cause problems.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，且“may call”不完整，应为“may cause problems”。