Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating similar phrases and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe your favourite machine and its uses.

例: My favourite machine at home is my mixer because it allows me to prepare a variety of dishes. For instance, I often use it to make cookies, sorbet, and hummus, which saves me a lot of time and effort.

提案: Your response addresses the question directly and provides personal reasons, which is good. However, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to improve the flow. Also, avoid repeating the same word ('sweeping machine') multiple times; use synonyms or pronouns instead.

例: I don't consider washing and sweeping machines indispensable, but a washing machine is quite useful since it saves me from hand-washing clothes. On the other hand, I don't find a sweeping machine necessary because I live alone and can manage cleaning without it.

提案: Your answer is honest and relevant, but it contains some repetition and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating words unnecessarily and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Generally, I don't read the instructions before using a machine unless I find it difficult to operate. In such cases, I refer to the manual to understand how it works.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but is incomplete and unclear towards the end. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid hesitation or repetition. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: I believe reading instructions is important because it helps you use machines safely and effectively. However, sometimes the manuals are too long and it's hard to identify the most crucial information.

× I believe my fav, the favorite machine I owned at my home is my mixer because it enables me to make these different preparations.

✓ I believe my favourite machine I own at my home is my mixer because it enables me to make these different preparations.

The phrase 'I owned' is incorrect here because the student is talking about a current possession, so the present tense 'I own' should be used. Also, 'fav' is informal and redundant with 'favorite'; 'favourite' alone is sufficient.

× I can make some cookies, I can make some sorbet, I can make a lot of things, I can make some hummus, and I really often use it to make these preparations.

✓ I can make some cookies, some sorbet, a lot of things, some hummus, and I often use it to make these preparations.

The phrase 'really often' is awkward; 'often' alone is more natural. Also, repeating 'I can make' is unnecessary; listing items with commas is clearer.

× Well, are they indispensable? I think not. But it really is useful to possess a washing machine because it means that you don't have to wash by hand every piece of clothing you own.

✓ Well, are they indispensable? I think not. But it is really useful to have a washing machine because it means that you don't have to wash every piece of clothing you own by hand.

The phrase 'it really is useful to possess' is awkward; 'it is really useful to have' is more natural. Also, 'wash by hand every piece of clothing' is better as 'wash every piece of clothing by hand' for correct preposition placement.

× A sweeping machine, I believe, is not necessary, at least for me, because I live alone and I don't need to have a sweeping machine.

✓ A sweeping machine, I believe, is not necessary, at least for me, because I live alone and don't need one.

Repeating 'sweeping machine' is redundant; using the pronoun 'one' is more concise and natural.

× To be honest, no, I never read the instructions. I only read them when it is absolutely necessary, when I don't understand how the machine works and when I am struggling to to make it function.

✓ To be honest, no, I never read the instructions. I only read them when it is absolutely necessary, when I don't understand how the machine works and when I am struggling to make it function.

There is a repeated word 'to' which is a typographical error and should be removed for correct grammar.

× But in other cases, no, I rarely, rarely read them.

✓ But in other cases, no, I rarely read them.

Repeating 'rarely' is unnecessary and sounds unnatural; using it once is sufficient.

× Yes, it seems evident for me too that reading the instructions is important.

✓ Yes, it also seems evident to me that reading the instructions is important.

The phrase 'evident for me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' as in 'evident to me'. Also, 'too' is better placed as 'also' for natural flow.

× But instruction lists are very often too long, and you never know which which are important, which are less important because they just, well, they they.

✓ But instruction lists are often too long, and you never know which parts are important and which are less important because they just, well, they...

The sentence has repeated words 'which which' and 'they they' which are errors. Also, 'instruction lists' should be followed by 'parts' or 'instructions' to clarify the subject. The sentence is incomplete and needs proper ending or ellipsis to indicate trailing off.