Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达有些错误，且句子较长且不够连贯。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和主谓一致，使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: My favorite machine at home is my laptop because I am an art student and need to design many pages. It greatly improves my efficiency and is much easier than using paper, which I often lose and cannot recall later.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确的问题，且句子结构不够清晰。建议注意单复数形式，使用恰当的连接词，并使句子更简洁明了。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are essential in daily life. Without them, I would spend about two hours washing clothes by hand. Thanks to these machines, I can save time and use it for more valuable activities.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，表达不够正式。建议使用完整句子，注意冠词和复数形式，避免口语化表达。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because I am not an engineer. I follow the steps carefully instead of trying to operate older machines without guidance.

提案: 回答较为完整，但部分表达略显重复。建议适当使用连接词，避免重复表达，提高语言的连贯性和多样性。

例: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions carefully before using any machine. Since I am not good with technical things, following the steps exactly helps me avoid mistakes, especially with older, more complicated machines. This ensures everything works properly and safely.

× So my favorite machine will definitely be my laptop which it really boosts my efficiency up and made my life much more easier than doing everything on paper which I couldn't really recall days later because the paper's gone.

✓ So my favorite machine will definitely be my laptop which really boosts my efficiency and makes my life much easier than doing everything on paper, which I couldn't really recall days later because the paper's gone.

句中“made”应与前文时态保持一致，改为“makes”，且“much more easier”中“more”和“-er”重复，改为“much easier”。此外，去掉多余的“it”。

× Yes, I believe washing machine and vacuum cleaners are essentially over the life.

✓ Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are essential in life.

“washing machine”应为复数形式“washing machines”，且“essentially over the life”表达不正确，应改为“essential in life”。

× Without them I will be hand washing my clothes 2 hours a day.

✓ Without them, I would be hand washing my clothes for 2 hours a day.

此处是假设情况，应该用虚拟语气“would be”而非“will be”，并且“hand washing”前加“be”构成进行时态。

× But by having these efficient machines I could use this 2 hour or more every day to for more valuable activities.

✓ But by having these efficient machines, I can use these 2 hours or more every day for more valuable activities.

“could”改为“can”更符合现在事实；“this 2 hour”应为复数“these 2 hours”；“to for”中“to”多余，应去掉。

× I'm not really an engineer person so I read instruction every time and I follow the instruction step by step instead of doing freestyles with older machine.

✓ I'm not really an engineer person, so I read instructions every time and I follow the instructions step by step instead of doing freestyles with older machines.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，且“older machine”应为复数“older machines”。

× Yes, I always read the instruction carefully before using any machines because I'm not very good with technical things.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using any machines because I'm not very good with technical things.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”，因为通常说明书是多条指令的集合。