Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, explain why you like the freezer and how you use it in daily life.

例: My favorite machine at home is the freezer because I love cold things like drinks and desserts. Whenever I buy food from outside, I put it in the freezer to keep it fresh until I eat it later.

提案: Your answer should be more organized and precise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear statements. Also, correct grammar and word choice to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us clean our homes and clothes efficiently. Moreover, they save a lot of time and energy, making daily chores easier.

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain why you read instructions using linking words. Use correct verb forms and natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they explain how to operate it safely and correctly. This helps me use the machine comfortably and avoid mistakes.

提案: Your answer should be clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct opinion, then provide specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors to improve naturalness.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they show how to use the machine properly. Otherwise, using it incorrectly could cause damage or safety problems.

× In my home my favorite machine is freeze because of I love cold type of things like cold drinks, cold everything that's why I love it and when I buy something from outer shop that time I'm drop it in the future and next eat it.

✓ In my home, my favorite machine is the freezer because I love cold things like cold drinks and cold food; that's why I love it. When I buy something from an outside shop, I put it in the freezer to eat later.

The sentence contains incorrect prepositions such as 'because of' used improperly and 'from outer shop' which should be 'from an outside shop'. Also, 'drop it in the future' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'put it in the freezer to eat later'. Using correct prepositions clarifies meaning and improves sentence flow.

× Yes, personally I think washing machine and sweeping machine are crucial in daily life because it tells us to cleaning home and also washing clothes and that helps our daily life and it's saving our energy too.

✓ Yes, personally I think washing machines and sweeping machines are crucial in daily life because they help us clean the home and wash clothes, which supports our daily life and saves our energy too.

The original sentence incorrectly uses singular forms 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' when referring generally, so plural forms are appropriate. Also, 'it tells us to cleaning home' is incorrect; it should be 'they help us clean the home'. Subject-verb agreement and pluralization are important for clarity.

× Yes, personally I think washing machine and sweeping machine are crucial in daily life because it tells us to cleaning home and also washing clothes and that helps our daily life and it's saving our energy too.

✓ Yes, personally I think washing machines and sweeping machines are crucial in daily life because they help us clean the home and wash clothes, which supports our daily life and saves our energy too.

The phrase 'tells us to cleaning home' is incorrect; the correct form is 'help us clean the home'. The verb 'help' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes, personally I think washing machine and sweeping machine are crucial in daily life because it tells us to cleaning home and also washing clothes and that helps our daily life and it's saving our energy too.

✓ Yes, personally I think washing machines and sweeping machines are crucial in daily life because they help us clean the home and wash clothes, which supports our daily life and saves our energy too.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to plural subjects 'washing machine and sweeping machine'. The correct pronoun is 'they' to match the plural subject. Proper pronoun agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× Of course I am using a machine. I always try to read the instruction because that helps me to how can I using that machine that is writing there and that is helps me to using machine comfortably.

✓ Of course I use machines. I always try to read the instructions because they help me understand how to use the machine as written, and that helps me use the machine comfortably.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and verb forms such as 'helps me to how can I using' which is incorrect. The correct structure is 'help me understand how to use'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to general guidelines. Correct preposition and verb usage improve clarity.

× Of course I am using a machine. I always try to read the instruction because that helps me to how can I using that machine that is writing there and that is helps me to using machine comfortably.

✓ Of course I use machines. I always try to read the instructions because they help me understand how to use the machine as written, and that helps me use the machine comfortably.

The word 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the set of guidelines. Using the correct quantifier (singular/plural) is important for grammatical accuracy.

× Personally I think it is so much crucial to read the instructor because of it helps me to how using this machine and it is properly writing there and that is also more in the using machine and also it is crucial to how it can be causing bad effect.

✓ Personally, I think it is very important to read the instructions because they help me understand how to use this machine properly. The instructions are clearly written, and reading them is crucial to avoid causing any bad effects.

The sentence misuses prepositions and phrases such as 'because of it helps me to how using' which is incorrect. The correct form is 'because they help me understand how to use'. Also, 'instructor' should be 'instructions'. Proper preposition use and word choice improve clarity and correctness.