Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then add specific details. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is my laptop. It helps me work from my office as a freelancer in IT. I value it a lot because it was a gift from my father on my birthday, making it very special to me.

提案: Try to use correct vocabulary and avoid confusing words like 'zipping machines'. Make your answer more concise and use linking words to explain why these machines are important.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life. For example, they help family members like mothers and sisters by saving time on household chores, which makes life easier.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better grammar and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and make your sentences more natural.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine, such as a washing machine or laptop. This helps me understand how to use them properly and avoid mistakes.

提案: Your answer should be clearer and more logical. Use linking words to explain your points and avoid vague phrases like 'or something else'.

例: Yes, it is important to read instructions before using a machine because it saves time and prevents errors. Even if someone is familiar with the machine, reading instructions can provide useful information.

× My favorite machine in my home is my own laptop where I can work and from my office for freelancing of IT work.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is my own laptop where I can work and do freelancing IT work from my office.

The phrase 'freelancing of IT work' is incorrect because 'freelancing' is a noun and should be followed by the activity directly. Also, 'and from my office' is misplaced. The sentence should clearly state that freelancing IT work is done from the office. This correction improves clarity and grammatical structure.

× This machine is supposed to me because it's my first care for my father and he gave me for my on my birthday.

✓ This machine is special to me because it's my first gift from my father and he gave it to me on my birthday.

The phrase 'supposed to me' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'special to me'. Also, 'first care for my father' is incorrect; it should be 'first gift from my father'. The prepositions 'for' and 'on' were misused. Correct prepositions improve the sentence's meaning and grammatical accuracy.

× This machine is really.

✓ This machine is really important to me.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a predicate. Adding 'important to me' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

✓ Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?

No correction needed here as the plural forms 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' are used correctly.

× Of course, washing machines and zipping machines are really important in daily life because when someone say, for example, when your mother say for your wife or your sister, these machines are really helpful for the necessity of human being in daily life.

✓ Of course, washing machines and sweeping machines are really important in daily life because, for example, when your mother tells your wife or your sister, these machines are really helpful for the necessities of human beings in daily life.

The word 'zipping' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping'. The verb 'say' should be 'tells' to agree with the singular subject. Also, 'necessity of human being' should be pluralized to 'necessities of human beings'. These corrections improve accuracy and clarity.

× So yes, this is very important because it saves time.

✓ So yes, these are very important because they save time.

The pronouns 'this' and 'it' refer to plural machines, so they should be 'these' and 'they' respectively to agree in number.

× Before I open the machine or using the machine, we always read the instructions to use every machine like sweeping machine, washing machine or any laptop.

✓ Before I open or use the machine, I always read the instructions for every machine like a sweeping machine, washing machine, or any laptop.

The phrase 'or using the machine' is incorrect; it should be parallel with 'open' as 'or use'. Also, 'we' is inconsistent with 'I' and should be 'I'. The preposition 'to use' should be 'for' to indicate purpose. Articles 'a' are needed before singular countable nouns.

× First I used to learn the instructions and then I can use easily for every machine.

✓ First, I learn the instructions and then I can use every machine easily.

The phrase 'used to learn' is incorrect here; simple present 'learn' fits better. The adverb 'easily' should be placed after the object. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary.

× Yes, sometimes it's really important to read the instructions before you use any machine because it saves your time when you want.

✓ Yes, sometimes it's really important to read the instructions before you use any machine because it saves your time when you want to use it.

The sentence is incomplete; 'when you want' should be followed by 'to use it' to complete the meaning. This clarifies the time reference and purpose.

× Sometimes when some people know about using the machine, then it can be more helpful because of their memory or something else.

✓ Sometimes, when people know how to use the machine, it can be more helpful because of their memory or other reasons.

The phrase 'know about using the machine' is awkward; 'know how to use the machine' is correct. 'Some people' can be simplified to 'people'. 'Something else' is vague; 'other reasons' is clearer. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.