Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar mistakes, such as 'it is' instead of 'it is the' and 'effective' instead of 'effectiveness'.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it is affordable and saves me a lot of time. While it washes my clothes, I can focus on other important tasks, which makes my daily routine much easier.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use correct vocabulary ('sweeping' instead of 'sweating') and provide a complete example to support your opinion. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are essential in every home because they save time. For example, while the machines are working, I can do other household tasks efficiently.

提案: Try to speak more fluently by reducing filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Use plural form 'instructions' and correct grammar such as 'before starting'. Also, clarify your points with linking words.

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me avoid damaging it. Also, I make sure to set up the machine properly before starting it.

提案: Improve clarity by avoiding repetition and correcting grammar. Use correct phrases like 'assemble all the parts' and 'use it safely and effectively'.

例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions before using a machine to ensure that you assemble all the parts correctly and use it safely and effectively.

× I think my favorite machine at home it is the washing machine because it is very very affordable and save me a lot of time while, uh, while it's washing my clothes effectiveness, I can focus on other important tasks which make my daily routine much easier overall.

✓ I think my favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it is very affordable and saves me a lot of time while washing my clothes effectively, so I can focus on other important tasks which make my daily routine much easier overall.

The original sentence has a redundant subject 'it is' after 'my favorite machine at home' which causes sentence structure error. Also, 'save' should be 'saves' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'while it's washing my clothes effectiveness' is incorrect; it should be 'while washing my clothes effectively' to use the correct verb form and adverb. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes. I personally think that the washing machines and the sweating machine are more essential uh in any house because they are affordable and save the time uh, while uh, I do other task in home, umm, for example, I can uh.

✓ Yes. I personally think that washing machines and sweeping machines are more essential in any house because they are affordable and save time while I do other tasks at home, for example, I can...

The phrase 'the washing machines and the sweating machine' is inconsistent; 'sweating machine' is incorrect and should be 'sweeping machine'. Also, 'the' is unnecessary before plural nouns when speaking generally. 'Save the time' should be 'save time' as 'time' is uncountable here. 'Other task' should be plural 'other tasks'. 'In home' should be 'at home' as the correct preposition for location. These corrections fix pluralization, article use, prepositions, and word choice.

× Uh, yes, I usually read the instruction before using a machine because I believe that uh, I have to read the all instruction uh, to avoid damage umm, the machine uh.

✓ Uh, yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because I believe that I have to read all the instructions to avoid damaging the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple steps. 'The all instruction' is incorrect; the correct order is 'all the instructions'. 'Avoid damage the machine' is incorrect; it should be 'avoid damaging the machine' using the gerund form after 'avoid'. These corrections address pluralization, article order, and verb form after 'avoid'.

× However, I like to make sure that I set all the machine before started.

✓ However, I like to make sure that I set up all the machines before starting.

'Set all the machine' is incorrect; it should be 'set up all the machines' to indicate preparation. 'Before started' is incorrect; it should be 'before starting' using the gerund form after 'before'. Also, 'machine' should be plural 'machines' if referring to multiple devices. These corrections fix verb usage and pluralization.

× Yes, I think it is important to read the instruction before using the machine to ensure that you sit all sit all the parts and use it safe and effecti effectiveness effectively.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions before using the machine to ensure that you set all the parts correctly and use it safely and effectively.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. 'Sit all sit all the parts' is incorrect and likely meant 'set all the parts'. 'Use it safe and effecti effectiveness effectively' is incorrect; the correct adverbs are 'safely and effectively'. These corrections address pluralization, word choice, and adverb usage.