Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about why you like the machine. For example, mention particular features or benefits. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is my Dyson hair dryer because it dries my hair quickly and prevents damage. Moreover, it's lightweight and easy to handle, which makes my morning routine much more efficient.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are essential because they save a lot of time and effort. For instance, using a washing machine ensures my clothes are thoroughly cleaned, while a sweeping machine helps keep the floors spotless with minimal effort.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar to make your answer more natural. Also, use linking words to explain why reading instructions is important, and provide a specific example.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using a machine because it helps me understand the correct steps. For example, when I first used my new blender, reading the manual prevented me from making mistakes.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Try to avoid repeating words and improve sentence flow with linking words.

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important as it ensures safe and efficient use of machines. For example, when I use new kitchen appliances, following the steps carefully prevents damage and keeps me safe.

× The brown name is Dyson.

✓ The brand name is Dyson.

The word 'brown' is an adjective describing colour and is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is 'brand', which refers to the manufacturer or trademark. Using the correct adjective 'brand' clarifies the meaning.

× It's make my life too convenient and it's easy to operate.

✓ It makes my life very convenient and it's easy to operate.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'too convenient' implies an excessive degree, which is likely unintended; 'very convenient' is more appropriate.

× I use it on daily basis and it's quite cheap and also very effective for me.

✓ I use it on a daily basis and it's quite cheap and also very effective for me.

The phrase 'on daily basis' is missing the article 'a'. The correct expression is 'on a daily basis' to indicate frequency.

× It makes life much more convenient.

✓ They make life much more convenient.

The subject refers to 'both' washing machines and sweeping machines, which is plural. Therefore, the verb should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject.

× Also, we have to use them every day and I find both of them affordable and highly effective for keeping my house clean and my clothes clean.

✓ Also, we have to use them every day and I find both affordable and highly effective for keeping my house and clothes clean.

The phrase 'both of them' is redundant after 'both'. Also, 'my house clean and my clothes clean' is repetitive; combining as 'my house and clothes clean' is more concise and natural.

× Yes, every time it's very important to read instructions on machine because we have to follow step by step and get knowledge how to operate this.

✓ Yes, every time it's very important to read instructions on the machine because we have to follow them step by step and learn how to operate it.

The phrase 'instructions on machine' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'follow step by step' needs the object 'them' to clarify what is being followed. 'Get knowledge how to operate this' is awkward; 'learn how to operate it' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I always read the instruction carefully because before using any machine because it helps me to understand how to operate it safely and efficiently.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using any machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and efficiently.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it usually refers to multiple steps. The sentence had redundant 'because' which is removed for clarity. Also, 'helps me to understand' can be simplified to 'helps me understand'.

× For example, when I use a new kitchen appliances following the step ensure I don't damage it or put myself at risk.

✓ For example, when I use new kitchen appliances, following the steps ensures I don't damage them or put myself at risk.

'A new kitchen appliances' is incorrect because 'appliances' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. The sentence needs a comma after 'appliances' to separate clauses. 'Following the step' should be plural 'steps' and the verb 'ensure' should be 'ensures' to agree with the singular subject 'following the steps'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'appliances'.