Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, structure your response with a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons. For example, mention how the washing machine saves time and effort, and why that is beneficial to you.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. Instead of washing clothes by hand, I can simply load them in and let the machine do the work, which is very convenient.

提案: Focus on clarity and coherence by avoiding unclear phrases like 'a totally save a lot of problem about our causes for us'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons why these machines are important.

例: Yes, I believe both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us save time and keep our homes clean. Without them, daily chores would be much more difficult and time-consuming.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide a more natural response.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using any machine because I am afraid of damaging it. Reading the instructions helps me use the machine safely and correctly.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct by simplifying your sentences. Use linking words to explain why reading instructions is important and provide specific benefits.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using a machine. This helps to avoid damaging the machine and ensures that I operate it correctly, which is very beneficial.

× When it comes to machine, and I would definitely say, uh, washing machine because washing machine saves a lot of time, umm, for us and uh, it creates really great benefits for us because we don't have to wash our, uh, laundry.

✓ When it comes to machines, I would definitely say the washing machine because washing machines save a lot of time for us and create great benefits since we don't have to wash our laundry.

The word 'machine' should be plural 'machines' when speaking generally. Also, 'washing machine' should be preceded by 'the' when referring to a specific type, and 'washing machine saves' should be 'washing machines save' to agree in number with the plural subject. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper article use.

× Yes, definitely, both machines are really, uh, useful for human beings, a totally save a lot of problem about our causes for us.

✓ Yes, definitely, both machines are really useful for human beings and totally save us a lot of problems related to our chores.

The phrase 'a totally save a lot of problem' is incorrect. 'Save' should not be preceded by 'a' and 'problem' should be plural 'problems' to match the context. Also, 'causes' is incorrect here; 'chores' fits better. This correction addresses pluralization and word choice.

× I do I always on read the instruction before I use the any machine because I totally afraid maybe I will umm, just umm, make them broken or anythings happen.

✓ I do. I always read the instructions before I use any machine because I am totally afraid I might just break it or something might happen.

The phrase 'I always on read' is incorrect; 'on' is unnecessary. 'The instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as machines usually have multiple instructions. 'I totally afraid' lacks the verb 'am'. 'Make them broken' is incorrect; 'break it' is appropriate. 'Anythings' should be 'something'. This correction fixes pronoun use, verb forms, and article usage.

× So I would definitely follow the instruction and uh, I think it's more safe.

✓ So I would definitely follow the instructions and I think it's safer.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'More safe' is less natural than the comparative form 'safer'. This correction improves pronoun number and adjective form.

× For me, I would say definitely imperative before using a machine and the in order to avoid damage it, damaging it.

✓ For me, I would say it is definitely imperative to read instructions before using a machine in order to avoid damaging it.

The original sentence lacks a verb after 'imperative' and has awkward phrasing 'damage it, damaging it'. The correction adds 'it is' and rephrases to 'avoid damaging it' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I would definitely just read the instruction like how to operate it correctly and I think it's really beneficial for.

✓ So I would definitely just read the instructions on how to operate it correctly, and I think it's really beneficial.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. The phrase 'like how to operate it' is better expressed as 'on how to operate it'. The sentence was incomplete; adding a proper ending improves clarity.