Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Also, clarify that the washing machine is for clothes, not dishes, to avoid confusion. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine. I use it every day because it saves me a lot of time and effort. Instead of washing clothes by hand, I just load them into the machine and it does the work for me.

提案: Your answer has repetition and unclear vocabulary ('sipping machines'). Try to avoid filler words and use correct terms. Also, explain why these machines help save time and money with clear linking words.

例: Definitely yes, nowadays washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. They help people save time and effort, allowing us to focus on other tasks and even save money on cleaning services.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and explain clearly why reading instructions is helpful. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Definitely yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. This helps me understand how it works and prevents mistakes or damage.

提案: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating the same phrases.

例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read instructions. Without them, you might not understand how the machine operates, which could lead to problems or damage.

× My the most favorite machine in my home is washing machine.

✓ My most favorite machine in my home is the washing machine.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly placed before 'most favorite'. Also, 'washing machine' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific machine in the home.

× I every day use this machine due to the fact that this machine is very convenient for me because I don't need to wash dishes by my hand and I just can put some dishes into the washing machine and that's all.

✓ I use this machine every day because it is very convenient for me since I don't need to wash dishes by hand and I can just put some dishes into the washing machine and that's all.

The adverb 'every day' should be placed after the verb 'use' for natural word order. 'Due to the fact that' is wordy; 'because' is simpler. 'By my hand' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand'. 'I just can' should be 'I can just' for correct modal verb placement.

× Definitely yes, in present days because people are able to manage their time by using washing machines or sipping machines.

✓ Definitely yes, nowadays because people are able to manage their time by using washing machines or sweeping machines.

'In present days' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'nowadays'. Also, 'sipping machines' is a mispronunciation or typo; it should be 'sweeping machines'.

× It's it it it is very convenient and allow us to economy.

✓ It is very convenient and allows us to save time.

The sentence contains repeated words 'it it it it' which is incorrect. 'Allow us to economy' is incorrect; the verb 'allow' should be followed by an object and an infinitive verb. 'Economy' is a noun; the correct verb is 'save' or 'manage' time or resources.

× I always read the instruction before using a machine because I need to how this work because without instructions I just can't do it.

✓ I always read the instructions before using a machine because I need to know how it works; without instructions, I just can't do it.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple steps. 'I need to how this work' is missing the verb 'know' and has incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'I need to know how it works'.

× And instructions helps to understand systems machines.

✓ And instructions help to understand machine systems.

The subject 'instructions' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' not 'helps'. Also, 'systems machines' is awkward; 'machine systems' is clearer.

× I think that it is very important to read instructions because if you don't read instruction maybe you can't understand machines system and how it works.

✓ I think that it is very important to read instructions because if you don't read the instructions, you may not understand the machine system and how it works.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and preceded by 'the' when referring to specific instructions. 'Machines system' should be 'machine system' with the definite article 'the'.