Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 중복된 표현을 피하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 전개하세요.

例: My favorite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps me clean my room and the entire house efficiently. Since I am often too lazy to clean, it is very useful for me.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 구체적인 이유를 제시하고, 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 논리적으로 구성하세요.

例: Yes, definitely. Washing machines and sweeping machines clean more thoroughly than manual cleaning. Moreover, they save both time and effort, making them very important in daily life.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간결하고 정확한 문장으로 답변하며, 이유를 명확히 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a machine because I am not very good at operating them. Reading instructions helps me use the machine correctly.

提案: 중복된 단어와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 구성하고, 구체적인 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 하세요.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions carefully before using a machine. For example, some machines are quite complicated, so reading the instructions helps me avoid mistakes.

× My favorite machine is a vacuum because they can clean my room and clean my whole my house.

✓ My favorite machine is a vacuum because it can clean my room and my whole house.

The subject 'machine' is singular, so the pronoun referring to it should be singular 'it' instead of plural 'they'. Also, 'my whole my house' is redundant; it should be 'my whole house'.

× Because I lazy to clean my room which is very good for me.

✓ Because I am lazy to clean my room, which is very good for me.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' after the subject 'I'. 'I lazy' is incorrect; it should be 'I am lazy'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses.

× Yes, definitely, because I think they can do more clean than when I clean my clothes.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I think they can clean better than when I clean my clothes.

The phrase 'do more clean' is incorrect. The verb 'clean' should be used directly with 'can' to express ability. Also, 'more clean' is not proper comparative form; 'clean better' is correct.

× Also it can save money and effort, so it is very important.

✓ Also, they can save money and effort, so they are very important.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'washing machines and sweeping machines', which is plural, so the plural pronoun 'they' should be used. Also, the verb should agree with the plural subject.

× I would say yes because since I'm not good using in machine I must read instruction before I using the machine which is more COM.

✓ I would say yes because since I'm not good at using machines, I must read instructions before I use the machine, which is more comfortable.

The phrase 'not good using in machine' is incorrect; it should be 'not good at using machines'. 'Must read instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Before I using' should be 'before I use'. 'More COM' is unclear; likely 'more comfortable' is intended.

× Yes, I usually read the in in instruction carefully before using a machine because I am not very good at operation new device.

✓ Yes, I usually read the instructions carefully before using a machine because I am not very good at operating new devices.

The phrase 'read the in in instruction' has repeated prepositions and should be 'read the instructions'. 'At operation new device' is incorrect; it should be 'at operating new devices'.

× For example, some machine can be quite complicated, so reading the interesting help me avoid mistake.

✓ For example, some machines can be quite complicated, so reading the instructions helps me avoid mistakes.

'Some machine' should be plural 'some machines'. 'Reading the interesting' is incorrect; likely 'reading the instructions' is intended. 'Help me avoid mistake' should be 'helps me avoid mistakes' to agree with singular subject and plural object.