Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve your grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'rice cooker place invite important role', say 'the rice cooker plays an important role'.

例: If you ask me, my favourite machine at home is the rice cooker because rice is a staple food in my diet. It plays an important role in my household as it cooks rice faster and more conveniently than traditional methods.

提案: Focus on using correct grammar and linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, use 'because they cover' instead of 'because of it larger surface area'. Also, avoid repeating similar words like 'tiring' and 'exhausting'.

例: In my opinion, washing machines and sweeping machines are important, especially in larger houses like bungalows or double-storey homes because they cover a larger surface area. Therefore, using these machines helps save time and effort compared to cleaning manually.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Use correct prepositions and plural forms, for example, 'details' instead of 'detail in details'. Also, say 'when you first use it' instead of 'when you first using it'.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it is important to understand how it works. For example, washing machines can be complicated when you first use them, so reading the manual helps a lot.

提案: Improve vocabulary and sentence structure. Use 'instruction book' in plural form as 'instruction books' or 'instruction manuals'. Replace 'moods' with 'modes'. Also, clarify your sentences to avoid confusion, for example, 'reading the manual helps us avoid damaging clothes and choose the right mode.'

例: Yes, I believe reading the instruction manual is very important. For example, washing machines have different modes for different types of fabrics. Reading the manual helps us avoid damaging clothes and select the appropriate mode.

× So eventually rice cooker place invite important role in my household because it can cooks the rice more, faster and easier.

✓ So eventually the rice cooker plays an important role in my household because it can cook the rice more, faster and easier.

The sentence has singular and plural issues. 'rice cooker place invite' is incorrect; it should be 'the rice cooker plays' to match singular subject and verb agreement. Also, 'can cooks' is incorrect; modal verbs like 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'can cook' is correct.

× In my opinion, I think these machines are important in larger houses such as bungalows or double Storey house because of it larger surface area.

✓ In my opinion, I think these machines are important in larger houses such as bungalows or double storey houses because of their larger surface area.

The sentence has singular and plural issues. 'double Storey house' should be plural 'double storey houses' to match 'larger houses'. Also, 'it larger surface area' is incorrect; 'it' should be 'their' to refer to plural houses.

× So cleaning manually might be quite tiring, exhausting and time consuming with the help of these machines.

✓ So cleaning manually might be quite tiring, exhausting and time consuming without the help of these machines.

The sentence structure is incorrect because the phrase 'with the help of these machines' contradicts the idea that manual cleaning is tiring. It should be 'without the help of these machines' to convey the intended meaning.

× For example, washing machines are quite complicated when you first using it, so reading a manual book is very important.

✓ For example, washing machines are quite complicated when you first use them, so reading a manual book is very important.

The phrase 'when you first using it' is incorrect; after 'when' we need the base verb form 'use'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'washing machines'.

× Yes, I believe reading instruction book is very important.

✓ Yes, I believe reading the instruction book is very important.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'instruction book'. Also, 'instruction book' is singular and should be preceded by 'the' to specify the book.

× Different kinds of fabrics use different kinds of moods.

✓ Different kinds of fabrics use different kinds of modes.

The word 'moods' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'modes', referring to settings on the washing machine.

× So reading the book is wider for us to avoid damaging the clothes and choose the right mood for the clothes.

✓ So reading the book helps us to avoid damaging the clothes and choose the right mode for the clothes.

The phrase 'is wider for us' is incorrect; it should be 'helps us' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'mood' should be 'mode' as per previous correction.