Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use proper sentence structures. Also, add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a bit more detail to enrich your answer.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it makes washing clothes very easy and saves a lot of time. Therefore, I find it very useful in my daily routine.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about why these machines are important and how they help in daily life.

例: Yes, nowadays, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort in cleaning, which is essential in our busy lives.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains filler words. Try to express your idea clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'read the total'. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, definitely. Before using any machine, I always read the instructions carefully to understand its basic functions and operate it correctly.

提案: Avoid excessive filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, it is important to read instructions because machines have many features, and understanding them helps us use the machines efficiently and safely.

× washing clothes be very easy

✓ washing clothes is very easy

The sentence requires the correct form of the verb 'to be' for the singular subject 'washing clothes' as a general activity. 'Be' is incorrect here; 'is' should be used to indicate the present tense singular form.

× washing machine and sweeping machine play a crucial role

✓ washing machines and sweeping machines play a crucial role

Since the question refers to both types of machines in general, the plural form 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' should be used to indicate more than one machine type.

× It may it minimize the time of cleaning

✓ It may minimize the time of cleaning

The sentence incorrectly repeats the subject 'it' after the modal verb 'may'. Modal verbs should be followed directly by the base form of the verb without repeating the subject.

× washing machine and sweeping machine play a crucial role in our life

✓ washing machines and sweeping machines play a crucial role in our lives

The plural forms 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' are appropriate here, and 'life' should be pluralized to 'lives' to refer to multiple people's lives.

× I basically read the total uh, then uh, I start with the IT basic functions

✓ I basically read the instructions, then I start with the basic functions

The phrase 'read the total' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'read the instructions'. Also, 'start with the IT basic functions' is unclear; 'start with the basic functions' is more appropriate. The preposition 'with' is correctly used here.

× if we, if we use it efficiently and uh, effectively, then it is mandatory for us to read all instructions manually

✓ if we use it efficiently and effectively, then it is mandatory for us to read all instructions manually

The repetition of 'if we' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. Removing the repeated phrase improves clarity and correctness.