Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more clear and coherent by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like the coffee machine. Also, correct vocabulary usage is important; for example, 'cooking machine' is incorrect here.

例: My favourite machine at home is my coffee machine because it allows me to enjoy both hot and cold coffee depending on the season. I find it very convenient and it helps me start my day with energy.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use plural forms correctly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples of how these machines help in daily life.

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help homeowners clean their houses more efficiently. For example, washing machines save time by quickly cleaning clothes, and sweeping machines make floor cleaning easier and faster.

提案: Improve sentence structure and avoid unnecessary pauses. Use plural forms correctly ('instructions' instead of 'instruction'). Explain clearly why reading instructions is helpful, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and efficiently. This way, I can avoid mistakes and prolong the machine's lifespan.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use correct vocabulary. For example, 'retirement of funds' is unclear; you might mean 'saving money'. Use linking words to connect your points logically and avoid vague expressions.

例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions before using any product because it helps you save money by preventing damage. Also, it ensures you use the item correctly and safely, which makes the process faster and more efficient.

× I love the cooking machine because it tells me to make my coffee either it was cold or hot.

✓ I love the coffee machine because it tells me to make my coffee whether it is cold or hot.

The phrase 'cooking machine' is incorrect; it should be 'coffee machine' to match the context. Also, 'either it was cold or hot' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'whether it is cold or hot' to express alternatives in present tense.

× I see that washing machine are very important because it helps uh, the, the owner of the home to organize their home better and tell them also to clean faster and helps them to save their time and effort actually in the same time.

✓ I see that washing machines are very important because they help the owners of the home to organize their home better, tell them also to clean faster, and help them save their time and effort at the same time.

The subject 'washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, pronouns should agree in number: 'it helps' should be 'they help' to match plural subject. 'Owner' should be plural 'owners' to match 'their'. 'In the same time' should be 'at the same time' as the correct preposition.

× I prefer to read the instruction and the rule before I buy any machine.

✓ I prefer to read the instructions and the rules before I buy any machine.

'Instruction' and 'rule' should be plural 'instructions' and 'rules' because generally multiple instructions and rules are provided for machines.

× It's helped me to, uh, return, uh, organize and know every detail about the machine, so I read a lot.

✓ It helps me to return, organize, and know every detail about the machine, so I read a lot.

The verb 'helped' is past tense but the context is present habitual action, so it should be 'helps' in present tense. Also, 'return' is unclear here; possibly 'return' is a mistake or misplaced.

× I think yes, it is very important to read the instruction and the rule before anything or any item you bought.

✓ I think yes, it is very important to read the instructions and the rules before anything or any item you buy.

'Instruction' and 'rule' should be plural 'instructions' and 'rules'. Also, 'you bought' is past tense but the context is general, so 'you buy' is correct present tense.

× That's because it's healthy to save retirement of funds if you read the instruction, and it helps you as well to be more careful and to make that process faster.

✓ That's because it's helpful to save money if you read the instructions, and it also helps you be more careful and make the process faster.

The phrase 'healthy to save retirement of funds' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'helpful to save money'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. The phrase 'make that process faster' is better without 'to' before 'make'.