Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'well'. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'when I cooking' to 'when I am cooking'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about how the air fryer helps you multitask.

例: My favorite machine at home is my air fryer because it has an innovative design. It helps me multitask while cooking; for example, I can prepare meals quickly and still have time to watch TV or do other chores.

提案: Avoid using filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more confident and natural. Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'also' properly to connect your ideas. Try to be more specific about how these machines save time and effort.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us a lot of time. For example, washing machines clean clothes quickly, and sweeping machines reduce the physical effort needed to clean floors.

提案: Improve your grammar by correcting mistakes such as 'if a device have' to 'if a device has'. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'it's if it is it was'. Make your answer clearer and more concise by structuring it with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Normally, I don't read the instructions before using a machine; I just plug it in and start using it. However, if the device is new to me or difficult to use, I read the instructions to understand how it works.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'well' to make your answer sound more natural. Use correct grammar, for example, 'was new for a person' should be 'is new to a person'. Provide more specific reasons why reading instructions is important and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions when using new equipment because it helps people understand how to operate it safely and effectively.

× It's helped me to multitask when I cooking.

✓ It's helped me to multitask when I am cooking.

The verb 'cooking' needs to be in the present participle form preceded by the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense, which is required here to indicate an action happening at the same time.

× Yes, I do believe these equipments could help us, umm, in many ways.

✓ Yes, I do believe this equipment could help us, umm, in many ways.

The word 'equipment' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'equipments'. Use 'this equipment' to refer to it correctly.

× But if a device have some difficulty in use and it's if it is it was new for me, I start reading the instructions of the machine.

✓ But if a device has some difficulty in use and if it is new for me, I start reading the instructions of the machine.

The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'device'. Also, the phrase 'it's if it is it was new for me' is confusing and redundant; it should be simplified to 'if it is new for me'.

× Yes, if the equipment was new for a person, it is necessary for them to read the instructions and uh, well, they can use the manual.

✓ Yes, if the equipment is new for a person, it is necessary for them to read the instructions and, uh, well, they can use the manual.

The conditional sentence refers to a general truth or present/future condition, so the verb 'was' should be in the present tense 'is' to match the context.