Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details about the machine and why it is your favourite. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite machine at home is the combined harvester from the Smesh company. I like it because I helped my father buy it, and it plays an important role in our farming work. It makes harvesting much faster and easier, which saves us a lot of time during the busy season.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more precise and natural. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Also, explain why these machines are important, not just why cleaning them is important. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help us keep our clothes and homes clean. Moreover, regular cleaning and maintenance of these machines prevent rust and damage, ensuring they work efficiently for a long time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on giving a direct answer first, then explain why you read instructions, using clear and simple language. Avoid confusing phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and logical.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. My father taught me that understanding how to use a machine properly helps prevent accidents and makes the work easier and safer.

提案: Your answer should be clearer and more grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement, then explain the benefits of reading instructions with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions before using any machine. This helps users operate the machine safely and efficiently, and it also prevents damage by showing the correct way to use it.

× I belong to a agricultural background.

✓ I belong to an agricultural background.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'agricultural'. This is an article usage issue related to singular and plural forms.

× I have a lot of machines which was bought up by my father here.

✓ I have a lot of machines which were bought by my father here.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'machines' (plural), so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× So my favorite machine is on combined harvester which is of the Smesh company because it was the time when I have wasted along with my father to purchase it.

✓ So my favorite machine is a combined harvester which is from the Smesh company because it was the time when I spent time with my father to purchase it.

The phrase 'on combined harvester' is incorrect; it should be 'a combined harvester' (singular). Also, 'which is of the Smesh company' is better expressed as 'which is from the Smesh company'. The phrase 'I have wasted' is incorrect in this context; 'I spent time' is appropriate. These are singular/plural and verb tense issues.

× It was my fun of the favorite machines in my home.

✓ It was my favourite machine at home.

The phrase 'my fun of the favorite machines' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'my favourite machine at home'. This is a singular/plural and sentence structure issue.

× Yes, it is very important to wash the machines as well as keeping them after the using them because if we not usually clean them they will become rusty as well as they will look bad.

✓ Yes, it is very important to wash the machines as well as keep them after using them because if we do not usually clean them, they will become rusty and look bad.

The phrase 'keeping them after the using them' is incorrect; it should be 'keep them after using them'. Also, 'if we not usually clean them' should be 'if we do not usually clean them'. These are verb form and sentence structure issues.

× Yes, I always read the instructions before using your machines because once a time my father told me that before using any machine it is very necessary to read its instruction for before its separation because it always make the use of that machine fire easier for us.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions before using machines because once my father told me that before using any machine it is very necessary to read its instructions before operation because it always makes using that machine easier for us.

The phrase 'your machines' is incorrect; it should be 'machines' or 'the machines'. 'Once a time' should be 'once'. 'Read its instruction for before its separation' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'read its instructions before operation'. 'Make the use of that machine fire easier' is incorrect; it should be 'makes using that machine easier'. These are pronoun, article, and verb tense issues.

× According to my perspective, it is very important to read the instructions before using, because reading instructions helps the user machine very easy as well as the machine works safely and more efficiently.

✓ From my perspective, it is very important to read the instructions before using a machine because reading instructions makes using the machine very easy and helps the machine work safely and more efficiently.

The phrase 'helps the user machine very easy' is incorrect; it should be 'makes using the machine very easy'. Also, 'the machine works safely' should be 'helps the machine work safely'. These are pronoun and verb form issues.

× As once my father told me that it is very important to understand how machine works, to what extents or damage.

✓ As my father once told me, it is very important to understand how a machine works and to what extent it can be damaged.

The phrase 'how machine works' should be 'how a machine works'. 'To what extents or damage' is unclear and should be 'to what extent it can be damaged'. These are article and sentence structure issues.