Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors like 'it it is' and 'less capacity up to 15 KGS'. Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, 'One of my favorite machines at home is the washing machine because it helps me save time by washing many clothes quickly, as it has a capacity of up to 15 kilograms.'

例: One of my favorite machines at home is the washing machine because it helps me save time by washing many clothes quickly, as it has a capacity of up to 15 kilograms.

提案: Your answer has repetition and unclear phrases like 'washing the clothes of of me' and 'sweeping machine is really important because to repair our clothes' which is incorrect. Try to be clear and precise. Use linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly' to organize your ideas. For example, 'Yes, both machines are important. Firstly, the washing machine reduces my workload by cleaning clothes for me and my family. Secondly, the sweeping machine helps keep our home clean.'

例: Yes, both machines are important. Firstly, the washing machine reduces my workload by cleaning clothes for me and my family. Secondly, the sweeping machine helps keep our home clean.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'help us to by informing the use usage' and 'use the three machine'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'Sir'. For example, 'Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it informs me how to use it properly. For instance, when I use the washing machine, I follow the steps carefully to avoid mistakes and make the process easier.'

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it informs me how to use it properly. For instance, when I use the washing machine, I follow the steps carefully to avoid mistakes and make the process easier.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using plural forms correctly ('instructions' instead of 'instruction') and adding linking words for better flow. For example, 'Yes, it is extremely important to read and follow the instructions before using a machine because it helps avoid errors and ensures correct operation. Furthermore, understanding the instructions improves safety and efficiency.'

例: Yes, it is extremely important to read and follow the instructions before using a machine because it helps avoid errors and ensures correct operation. Furthermore, understanding the instructions improves safety and efficiency.

× One of my favorite machines is a washing machine. It it is really convenient for me because it helps me a lot by taking my workload effectively, such as I can wash my clothes through it within a short period of time and my washing machine has less capacity up to 15 KGS, so I can wash many clothes.

✓ One of my favorite machines is a washing machine. It is really convenient for me because it helps me a lot by reducing my workload effectively, such as allowing me to wash my clothes within a short period of time. My washing machine has a capacity of up to 15 KGS, so I can wash many clothes.

The sentence had repetition ('It it is') and awkward phrasing ('taking my workload effectively'). The verb 'taking' is incorrect here; 'reducing' or 'lessening' workload is appropriate. Also, 'has less capacity up to 15 KGS' is unclear; it should be 'has a capacity of up to 15 KGS'. These corrections improve clarity and correct verb usage in present tense.

× First of all, washing machine can lessen my workload by washing my by washing the clothes of of me and my family members.

✓ First of all, the washing machine can lessen my workload by washing the clothes of me and my family members.

The sentence missed the definite article 'the' before 'washing machine' and had repeated words ('by washing', 'of of'). Also, 'clothes of of me' is incorrect; it should be 'clothes of me'. These corrections fix singular/plural and article usage errors.

× And sweeping machine is a really important because to repair our clothes.

✓ And the sweeping machine is really important because it helps to clean our floors.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'to repair our clothes' which is illogical for a sweeping machine. Also, it misses the article 'the' before 'sweeping machine'. The correction replaces the incorrect phrase with a logical purpose of a sweeping machine and adds the article.

× Yes Sir, it's really important to read the instruction before using a machine because it help us to by informing the use usage of a machine.

✓ Yes Sir, it's really important to read the instructions before using a machine because it helps us by informing us about the usage of the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'to by informing the use usage' is incorrect and corrected to 'by informing us about the usage'. Also, 'the machine' is more specific here.

× For example, when I use the three machine, I carefully follow the instructions to learn the correct steps which makes the process smoother and prevent mistakes.

✓ For example, when I use the washing machine, I carefully follow the instructions to learn the correct steps which make the process smoother and prevent mistakes.

'Three machine' is incorrect; likely meant 'washing machine'. Also, 'which makes' should be 'which make' because 'steps' is plural. These corrections fix article misuse and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, it is extremely important to read and follow the instruction before using a machine because it helps people to avoid the error and operate it correctly.

✓ Yes, it is extremely important to read and follow the instructions before using a machine because it helps people avoid errors and operate it correctly.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple steps. 'The error' should be plural 'errors' to generalize. Also, 'helps people to avoid' is better as 'helps people avoid' for smoother phrasing.