Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'maybe' to make your answer sound more confident and natural. Also, correct vocabulary mistakes such as 'microbe' instead of 'microwave'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: My favourite machine at home is my microwave. I use it to cook meals for two to three days in advance, which saves me a lot of time. Additionally, it is very convenient because I can quickly warm my food whenever I want.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words to make your answer clearer. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect your ideas. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion, and keep your sentences grammatically correct and concise.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort. For example, my washing machine cleans my clothes quickly, which is helpful since I sweat a lot. Also, the sweeping machine keeps my house clean, especially because my mother and I are usually busy.

提案: Try to avoid hesitations and unclear phrases like 'Or are they?'. Use clear and direct sentences with proper linking words such as 'however' or 'but'. Keep your answer concise and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: I usually don't read the instructions when using a machine. However, if I am unfamiliar with the model or if there is a problem, I refer to the instructions to understand how to use it properly.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words like 'because' and 'also' more effectively. Try to make your sentences more concise and clear.

例: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions because machines can have different functions. Also, if there is a problem, the instructions help to solve it quickly and safely.

× I cook my meals, meals for two to three days and then I can just warm, warm my food using the microbe.

✓ I cook my meals, meals for two to three days and then I can just warm my food using the microwave.

The word 'microbe' is a mispronunciation or incorrect use of the noun 'microwave'. It is important to use the correct noun to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× my clothes gets dirty real quick and real fast and they're stinky all the time.

✓ my clothes get dirty real quick and real fast and they're stinky all the time.

The subject 'clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'get' instead of 'gets' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× So my washing machine saves the hassle for me and for the and for the sweeping machine.

✓ So my washing machine saves the hassle for me and for the sweeping machine.

The phrase 'and for the and for the sweeping machine' contains a repeated and unnecessary 'and for the'. Removing the repetition clarifies the sentence.

× Umm, I I me and my mother are usually busy so.

✓ Umm, my mother and I are usually busy, so.

The original sentence has repeated pronouns and incorrect word order. The correct subject order is 'my mother and I' and removing repeated words improves clarity.