Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: My favorite machine at home is definitely the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort by automatically cleaning my clothes. For example, instead of hand washing, I can use the washing machine and focus on other tasks.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp và câu ví dụ không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và trình bày ý tưởng mạch lạc, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important in modern homes because they save a lot of time and effort. For example, washing machines clean clothes thoroughly and help maintain good hygiene.

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và không rõ ràng, không trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ và rõ ràng hơn để thể hiện khả năng giao tiếp.

例: No, I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I find them complicated and prefer to learn by trying.

提案: Câu trả lời quá ngắn và thiếu lý do giải thích. Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách đưa ra lý do hoặc ví dụ để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: No, I don't think it is very important to read the instructions because many machines are easy to use, but sometimes reading them can help avoid mistakes.

× My favorite machine at home is definitely the washing machine is saved me a lot of time and effort by automatically cleaning my clothes, which is especially helpful after a long day.

✓ My favorite machine at home is definitely the washing machine because it has saved me a lot of time and effort by automatically cleaning my clothes, which is especially helpful after a long day.

The original sentence contains a run-on structure with two independent clauses joined incorrectly without a conjunction or proper punctuation. Adding 'because' clarifies the relationship between the clauses and corrects the sentence structure.

× For example, instead of hand washing, I can simply wash the machine and focus on other.

✓ For example, instead of hand washing, I can simply use the machine and focus on other things.

The phrase 'wash the machine' is incorrect because the machine is not what is being washed; the clothes are. Also, 'focus on other' is incomplete and needs an object. Changing to 'use the machine' and 'focus on other things' corrects the pronoun and sentence completeness.

× Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in modern towers.

✓ Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in modern homes.

The preposition 'in' followed by 'modern towers' is unusual and likely incorrect in this context. 'Modern homes' is a more appropriate phrase to describe where these machines are important.

× They save a significant amount of time and effort compared to doing laundry or cleaning annually.

✓ They save a significant amount of time and effort compared to doing laundry or cleaning manually.

The word 'annually' (once a year) does not fit logically here. The intended meaning is likely to contrast machine use with manual effort, so 'manually' is the correct adverb.

× For example. Washing machines ensure closer and cleaned trolley and hygiene slowly.

✓ For example, washing machines ensure clothes are cleaner and maintain hygiene effectively.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'closer and cleaned trolley' and 'hygiene slowly.' The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper sentence structure and word choice.