Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和重复，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I dislike washing clothes by hand. It saves me a lot of time and cleans clothes more efficiently.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题。建议注意主谓一致，避免语句不完整，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time. Moreover, with technological advances, these machines have become more convenient and intelligent. For example, you can say, 'Hey Siri, start cleaning the floor,' and the machine will do it automatically.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议改进语法，避免重复，并更清楚地表达观点。

例: To be honest, I am confident using new machines, so I rarely read the instructions. However, I think instructions are very important for people who are not familiar with new technology.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确的词汇，并使句子更连贯。

例: I think it depends on the item. For example, smartphones and laptops are easy to use without instructions. But for devices like drones and robots, reading the instructions is very important.

× I maybe hate to do washing clothes by hand, so the washing machine helps me a lot to do that and help me to save time and to, uh, washing the clothes more cleaning and efficiently.

✓ I maybe hate to wash clothes by hand, so the washing machine helps me a lot to do that and helps me to save time and to wash the clothes more cleanly and efficiently.

这里“washing clothes”应改为动词短语“wash clothes”，因为“do washing clothes”结构不正确。动词后面直接用动词原形表示动作。

× I maybe hate to do washing clothes by hand, so the washing machine helps me a lot to do that and help me to save time and to, uh, washing the clothes more cleaning and efficiently.

✓ I maybe hate to wash clothes by hand, so the washing machine helps me a lot to do that and helps me to save time and to wash the clothes more cleanly and efficiently.

“help me to save time and to, uh, washing the clothes”中“washing”应改为动词原形“wash”，保持动词形式一致。

× Oh, definitely. I think those machine are very significant because they really save a lot of time.

✓ Oh, definitely. I think those machines are very significant because they really save a lot of time.

“those machine”中“machine”应为复数形式“machines”，因为“those”指复数。

× For example, uh, you just to say, Hey, Siri, those machine will start cleaning the floor and that will.

✓ For example, uh, you just say, Hey, Siri, those machines will start cleaning the floor and that will.

“you just to say”中“to”多余，应去掉，正确表达为“you just say”。

× For example, uh, you just to say, Hey, Siri, those machine will start cleaning the floor and that will.

✓ For example, uh, you just say, Hey, Siri, those machines will start cleaning the floor and that will.

“those machine”应为复数“those machines”，与“those”保持一致。

× I'm quite confident to using new machine, so I seldom seldom read the instruction before when I using a new machine.

✓ I'm quite confident using new machines, so I seldom read the instructions before when I use a new machine.

“confident to using”应改为“confident using”，动词“confident”后接动名词形式。

× I'm quite confident to using new machine, so I seldom seldom read the instruction before when I using a new machine.

✓ I'm quite confident using new machines, so I seldom read the instructions before when I use a new machine.

“new machine”应为复数“new machines”，因为泛指多台机器。

× I'm quite confident to using new machine, so I seldom seldom read the instruction before when I using a new machine.

✓ I'm quite confident using new machines, so I seldom read the instructions before when I use a new machine.

“the instruction”应为复数“the instructions”，因为通常说明书是复数。

× I'm quite confident to using new machine, so I seldom seldom read the instruction before when I using a new machine.

✓ I'm quite confident using new machines, so I seldom read the instructions before when I use a new machine.

“when I using”应改为“when I use”，动词应为一般现在时，表示习惯动作。

× But for my mind those instructions are very significant for them 'cause they know little about the new technology.

✓ But in my opinion, those instructions are very significant for them because they know little about the new technology.

“for my mind”应改为“in my opinion”，表达更自然。

× But for my mind those instructions are very significant for them 'cause they know little about the new technology.

✓ But in my opinion, those instructions are very significant for them because they know little about the new technology.

“'cause”是口语缩写，正式写作应使用“because”。

× I think it's really depends on different kind of items.

✓ I think it really depends on different kinds of items.

“depends on different kind of items”中“kind”应为复数“kinds”，与“different”搭配。

× I think it's really depends on different kind of items.

✓ I think it really depends on different kinds of items.

“different kind of items”应为“different kinds of items”，表示多种类。

× For example, your smartphone, your laptop, I think is really easy to use them without the instruction.

✓ For example, your smartphone, your laptop, I think it is really easy to use them without the instructions.

“the instruction”应为复数“the instructions”，因为通常说明书是复数。

× For example, your smartphone, your laptop, I think is really easy to use them without the instruction.

✓ For example, your smartphone, your laptop, I think it is really easy to use them without the instructions.

“I think is”缺少主语，应为“I think it is”。

× But for some things like drone and Robert, I think the instruction is very significant.

✓ But for some things like drones and robots, I think the instructions are very significant.

“drone and Robert”应为复数“drones and robots”，且“Robert”应为“robot”。“instruction”应为复数“instructions”。