Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy such as 'explore in the Internet the things that I want to learn' which can be simplified.

例: My favourite machine at home is the computer because it allows me to learn new things online and stay in touch with my family and friends.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and clearer linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'essential' and try to provide more specific reasons or examples for why these machines are important.

例: Yes, both washing and sweeping machines are vital for daily life. For instance, washing machines save time by quickly cleaning clothes, which is important since we need fresh clothes regularly.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer linking words. Also, be more specific about when you read instructions and when you don't.

例: Sometimes I read the instructions, especially for new machines. However, for familiar devices like computers, I usually know how to use them without reading the manual.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward expressions such as 'read the structures'. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures, and include linking words to improve coherence.

例: It depends. For machines I am familiar with, I don't usually read the instructions. However, for new devices, I find it helpful to read the manual to understand how to use them properly.

× I can explore in the Internet the things that I want to learn

✓ I can explore the things that I want to learn on the Internet

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'explore' and 'Internet'. The correct preposition to indicate location or medium for exploring information online is 'on'. Therefore, 'explore on the Internet' is correct.

× there are some machines that doesn't require to follow these exactly paths that the instructions usually have

✓ there are some machines that don't require following exactly the paths that the instructions usually have

The subject 'machines' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' instead of 'doesn't'. Also, 'require to follow' is incorrect; the verb 'require' is followed by a gerund ('following') rather than an infinitive. Additionally, 'exactly paths' is incorrect word order; it should be 'exactly the paths' or 'the exact paths'.

× For example the computers you can turn it on by heart

✓ For example, with computers you can turn them on by heart

The phrase 'turn it on by heart' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate method is 'with'. Also, 'computers' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'. The phrase 'by heart' means 'from memory' and is acceptable here but needs better sentence structure.

× you don't know how to use it, so would be beneficial if you read the structures before

✓ you don't know how to use it, so it would be beneficial if you read the instructions before

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'would be beneficial'. Also, 'structures' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'instructions'. The sentence needs these corrections for clarity and grammatical correctness.