Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer wa sukoshi nagai desu. Motto shizen de, chokusetsu shitsumon ni kotaeru you ni shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'My favourite machine is the air conditioner because Okinawa is very hot. It helps me stay cool and comfortable.' to iu fuu ni, motto kantan de wakariyasui kotoba de kotaeru koto ga taisetsu desu.

例: My favourite machine is the air conditioner because Okinawa is very hot. It helps me stay cool and comfortable during the summer.

提案: Kotae ga fukuzatsu sugite, hanashi ga todomatte imasu. Motto seikaku ni, rikai shi yasui kotoba de kotaeru koto ga hitsuyou desu. Tatoeba, 'Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort compared to doing chores by hand.' to iu fuu ni kotaete kudasai.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort compared to doing chores by hand.

提案: Kotoba no tsukaikata ga sukoshi fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Motto shizen na eigo de, jisho o yomu riyuu o seikaku ni setsumei shite kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I often read the instructions because I have seen people damage new machines by using them incorrectly.' to iu fuu ni kotaete kudasai.

例: Yes, I often read the instructions because I have seen people damage new machines by using them incorrectly.

提案: Kotae ga sukoshi fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Motto seikaku ni, rikai shi yasui kotoba de kotaete kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, it is important to read instructions to avoid damaging machines or causing accidents.' to iu fuu ni kotaete kudasai.

例: Yes, it is important to read instructions to avoid damaging machines or causing accidents.

× Our favorite machine I would say air conditioner because Okinawa has high temperature and sometimes that makes me feel annoyed with sweat.

✓ Our favorite machine, I would say, is the air conditioner because Okinawa has high temperatures and sometimes that makes me feel annoyed with sweat.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'air conditioner' because it refers to a specific machine. Also, 'high temperature' should be plural 'high temperatures' to indicate the general climate condition. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× So there is mandatory for living in Okinawa.

✓ So it is mandatory for living in Okinawa.

The phrase 'there is mandatory' is incorrect because 'mandatory' is an adjective and needs a subject like 'it' with a linking verb 'is'. 'There is' is used for existence, which is not appropriate here.

× Washing machine, uh, help us to wash laundry easily.

✓ The washing machine helps us to wash laundry easily.

The subject 'washing machine' is singular and requires the verb 'helps' with an 's' for third person singular agreement. Also, adding 'The' specifies the machine type.

× Umm, before that we have we had to wash uh, on our hand, but the washing machine, umm, decrease the cost and.

✓ Before that, we had to wash by hand, but the washing machine decreases the cost and effort.

The phrase 'we have we had' is redundant; 'we had' is correct past tense. 'On our hand' should be 'by hand' as the correct expression. 'Decrease' should be 'decreases' to agree with singular subject 'washing machine' in present tense.

× Yes, I often lead UMM instruction because umm, I have.

✓ Yes, I often read the instructions because, umm, I have.

The verb 'lead' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'read' (pronounced 'reed'). Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it usually refers to multiple steps.

× I have watched UMM destroy the new machine even just after buying it and the first using.

✓ I have watched, umm, people destroy the new machine even just after buying it and the first use.

The sentence lacks a subject for 'destroy'; adding 'people' clarifies meaning. 'The first using' is incorrect; 'the first use' is the proper noun phrase. Also, commas improve clarity.

× So I try.

✓ So I try to be careful.

The sentence 'So I try.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'to be careful' completes the thought and clarifies the intended meaning.

× As I mentioned earlier, some people miss are to use and destroy the building, uh, destroy the machine.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, some people misuse and destroy the machine.

The phrase 'miss are to use' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'misuse'. 'Destroy the building' is likely a mistake; context suggests 'destroy the machine'. Removing unnecessary words improves clarity.

× So and umm, to avoid this kind of case, yeah, I need to read.

✓ So, umm, to avoid this kind of case, yeah, I need to read the instructions.

The sentence is incomplete without specifying what to read. Adding 'the instructions' completes the meaning and improves clarity.