Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about why the washing machine is helpful.

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it is fully automatic and saves me a lot of time. Since I have a hectic schedule, it helps me clean my clothes quickly and efficiently, allowing me to focus on other tasks.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain why these machines are important and provide specific reasons related to busy lifestyles.

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because in today's busy life, they help people save time. These machines make household chores easier and allow us to manage our work and home responsibilities more effectively.

提案: Work on completing your sentences clearly and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to explain the importance of reading instructions and provide specific benefits.

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely. By doing so, I can avoid mistakes and prevent any accidents or damage.

提案: Improve sentence fluency and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear reasons why reading instructions is important.

例: Yes, reading the instructions is important because it ensures our safety. By following the guidelines carefully, we can operate machines correctly and avoid injuries.

× My favorite machine in my home is washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the washing machine.

The noun 'washing machine' is a singular, countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific item known to both speaker and listener.

× It helped me to clean my clothes.

✓ It helps me to clean my clothes.

The present tense 'helps' is appropriate here because the action is habitual or ongoing, not a completed past action.

× It's it's fully automatic.

✓ It's fully automatic.

The repetition of 'it's' is redundant and incorrect; only one 'it's' is needed to convey the meaning.

× That's why it's helped me in my work, in my hectic schedule.

✓ That's why it helps me in my work, in my hectic schedule.

The present tense 'helps' is suitable here to indicate a current and ongoing benefit, rather than a past completed action.

× I think washing machine and sweeping machine are very important for two days busy schedules and because everyone, everyone is are working in two days life.

✓ I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for today's busy schedules because everyone is working in today's life.

Plural forms 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' are needed to match the plural subject. Also, 'two days' should be corrected to 'today's' to make sense in context. The phrase 'everyone is are' contains a subject-verb agreement error; 'is' is correct.

× So these two machines are helpful and to do homework, homework very easily.

✓ So these two machines are helpful to do household work very easily.

The phrase 'and to do homework, homework' is awkward and repetitive. 'Household work' is a clearer term here. Also, the conjunction 'and' is unnecessary before 'to do'.

× Actions before using a machine because it's very necessary by by reading instructions we can we can.

✓ We should take actions before using a machine because it is very necessary. By reading instructions, we can...

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb. Reordering and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× We can understand how to operate the machine and what precautions we can keep in mind, uh, to.

✓ We can understand how to operate the machine and what precautions we should keep in mind.

The phrase 'we can keep in mind, uh, to' is incomplete and awkward. Using 'should keep in mind' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think it's important to read the instructions because the our due to our safety by instructions read carefully, we can we can operate the machine easily and and save ourself from any injury.

✓ Yes, I think it's important to read the instructions because for our safety, by reading instructions carefully, we can operate the machine easily and save ourselves from any injury.

The phrase 'the our due to our safety by instructions read carefully' is ungrammatical and confusing. Correcting to 'for our safety, by reading instructions carefully' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'save ourself' should be 'save ourselves' to match the plural pronoun 'we'.