Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构较为简单，部分表达不够自然，且有语法错误，如“those hardly to wash them by hands”表达不清晰。建议加强句子连贯性，避免重复，使用更准确的表达。

例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it helps me do the laundry efficiently. We share housework, and this machine makes washing clothes like jeans and pants much easier and faster than washing by hand.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当，如“candle machine”应为“household machines”，且表达不够清晰。建议使用准确词汇，注意主谓一致，并丰富细节。

例: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because they reduce the amount of housework, allowing people, especially homemakers, to have more free time for hobbies or part-time jobs.

提案: 回答中表达不够准确，存在语法错误，如“Most function don't need to read the insurance”应为“Most functions don't require reading the instructions”。建议注意语法和用词准确性，表达更清晰。

例: No, I usually read the instructions while using the machine if necessary. Nowadays, most appliances have user-friendly touch screens, so it's often easy to operate them without reading the manual.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，注意句子结构和逻辑连贯性。

例: It depends. For most appliances, it's safe to use them without reading the instructions. However, for potentially dangerous devices like microwaves, reading the instructions is important to avoid accidents.

× In my home, we share the housework and it's my duty to do the laundry for everyone.

✓ In my home, we share the housework and it's my duty to do the laundry for everyone.

该句无单复数错误，保持原句。

× With the help of the washing machine, I can easily wash the clothes, pants, jeans, those hardly to wash them by hands and it's also dry.

✓ With the help of the washing machine, I can easily wash clothes, pants, jeans, those that are hard to wash by hand and it also dries them.

“hardly”是副词，表示“几乎不”，此处应使用形容词“hard”来修饰“to wash”，且“by hands”应改为“by hand”，表示用手洗。动词“dry”应改为第三人称单数“dries”，与主语“it”一致。

× In my opinion these two candle machine has relieved home wives from endless housework and they have time to do something they like or to do a part time job.

✓ In my opinion, these two candle machines have relieved housewives from endless housework and they have time to do something they like or to do a part-time job.

“machine”应为复数“machines”，因为前面有“two”。“has”应改为“have”，与复数主语一致。“home wives”应为“housewives”，且“part time job”应加连字符为“part-time job”。

× No, actually I read them during.

✓ No, actually I read them while using the machine.

“read them during”不完整，缺少介词宾语，需补充完整表达，如“while using the machine”。

× Most function don't need to read the insurance.

✓ Most functions don't need to read the instructions.

“function”应为复数“functions”，与“most”搭配。且“insurance”应为“instructions”，语义更符合上下文。

× Well, it depends. For most appliances they are safe even if we don't read the instructions we want to lead to danger.

✓ Well, it depends. For most appliances, they are safe even if we don't read the instructions; they won't lead to danger.

原句结构混乱，缺少逗号和连接词，导致语义不清。应分句并加标点，使句意明确。

× But for some of the dangerous one, just like the microwave, if you don't read the instruction.

✓ But for some dangerous ones, just like the microwave, if you don't read the instructions, it can be dangerous.

“one”应为复数“ones”，与“some”搭配。句子不完整，缺少主句，需补充完整表达。