Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by avoiding listing too many items at once and by using clearer linking words to connect ideas. Try to focus on one or two machines and explain why they are important with specific reasons.

例: My favourite machine at home is my smartphone because it helps me stay connected with my friends and access information quickly. Additionally, I often use my hair dryer to save time when getting ready in the morning.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some incorrect word choices. To improve, use simple and correct vocabulary, and organize your ideas logically with linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and explain clearly why these machines are important.

例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save us a lot of time and effort. For example, washing machines clean clothes quickly, and sweeping machines help keep the house clean without much physical work.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clear structure. To improve, answer directly, use correct grammar, and explain your habits clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I usually read the instructions before using a new machine to understand how it works. However, if I am familiar with the machine, I might not read the instructions carefully.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but is grammatically incorrect and incomplete. To improve, use correct sentence structures, avoid repetition, and finish your thoughts clearly.

例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions carefully because it helps us use the machines correctly and avoid mistakes that could cause damage.

× Well, I would say my hair dryer and straightener and of course my smartphone.

✓ Well, I would say my hair dryer, straightener, and of course my smartphone.

The original sentence lacks commas to separate items in a list, which can cause confusion. Adding commas clarifies that these are three separate items. This is a punctuation issue related to listing plural items clearly.

× Of course it makes our time and efforts very accessible and combinant.

✓ Of course, they make our time and efforts much easier and more efficient.

The subject 'washing machines and sweeping machines' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'accessible and combinant' is incorrect usage; 'easier and more efficient' better conveys the intended meaning. This is a subject-verb agreement and word choice issue.

× Of course it makes our time and efforts very accessible and combinant.

✓ Of course, they make our time and efforts much easier and more efficient.

The adjectives 'accessible' and 'combinant' are incorrectly used here. 'Accessible' means easy to approach or use, which is not appropriate for 'time and efforts'. 'Combinant' is not a common English word. Using 'easier' and 'more efficient' better describes saving time and effort.

× And also people don't have to struggle enough to just to wash their clothes.

✓ Also, people don't have to struggle so much just to wash their clothes.

The phrase 'struggle enough' is incorrect; 'struggle so much' is the correct collocation. Also, 'just to wash their clothes' is fine but 'just to' is repeated unnecessarily. This is an issue with adverb usage and redundancy.

× When you have the washing machine and go through a lot of pains, just swipe the flowers.

✓ When you have a washing machine, you don't have to go through a lot of pain; you can just swipe the floors.

The sentence is confusing and contains errors: 'go through a lot of pains' should be 'go through a lot of pain'; 'swipe the flowers' is incorrect, likely meant 'sweep the floors'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and unclear. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× Definitely, who doesn't like it? Depends to like what?

✓ Definitely, who doesn't like it? It depends on what you like.

'Depends to like what?' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'It depends on what you like.' This is an incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns.

× I'm so too familiar with the machines or I already have them one before I just do it alone.

✓ I'm very familiar with the machines, or I have already used them before, so I just do it on my own.

'I'm so too familiar' is incorrect; 'very familiar' is correct. 'I already have them one before' is ungrammatical; 'I have already used them before' is correct. 'Do it alone' is better expressed as 'do it on my own.' This sentence has multiple pronoun and word choice errors.

× But when there's a new one launch in the market I definitely look through the.

✓ But when a new one is launched in the market, I definitely look through the instructions.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'New one launch' should be 'new one is launched'. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'instructions' completes the thought. This is a sentence structure and verb tense issue.

× Of course, no doubt it's very crucial for anyone to go to the instructions very carefully to understand how actually we can just make the machines because we might even make some mistakes and that mistakes can cause a lot of problems.

✓ Of course, no doubt it's very crucial for anyone to read the instructions carefully to understand how we can actually use the machines because we might make some mistakes, and those mistakes can cause a lot of problems.

'Go to the instructions' is incorrect; 'read the instructions' is correct. 'How actually we can just make the machines' is awkward; 'how we can actually use the machines' is better. 'That mistakes' should be 'those mistakes'. This sentence has incorrect prepositions, word order, and pronoun errors.

× So we should always.

✓ So we should always do that.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object. Adding 'do that' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. This is a sentence structure error.