Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误和重复，建议简化句子，使用连词使表达更流畅，并注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

例: My favorite machine at home is the robot vacuum cleaner because sweeping the floor is tiring and time-consuming. Since I am busy with work, this machine helps me save energy and keeps my home clean conveniently.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议理清逻辑，避免重复，使用正确的动词形式，并提供更具体的理由支持观点。

例: Yes, I think washing and sweeping machines are very important because they help keep my home clean. Without regular cleaning, dust can accumulate and affect the machines' performance, so I usually sweep once a week to maintain cleanliness.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子重复且不够连贯，建议使用连词连接句子，避免重复，并注意单复数和冠词的使用。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because there are many steps to follow. Reading the instructions helps me use the machine effectively and quickly.

提案: 回答较为完整，但表达稍显简单，建议丰富词汇，使用更多连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because they help us understand how to operate machines properly. By following the steps, we can use the machines efficiently and avoid mistakes.

× My favorite machine in my home is robot vacuum cleaner on because swiping floor is very troublesome and it requires me lots of energy and I increase my workforce uh when because I am very busy at work so the robot is very convenient.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the robot vacuum cleaner because sweeping the floor is very troublesome and it requires a lot of my energy. I increase my workforce when I am very busy at work, so the robot is very convenient.

这里“robot vacuum cleaner”缺少冠词“the”，且“swiping floor”应为“sweeping the floor”，名词“floor”前需要加定冠词“the”。“lots of energy”应改为“a lot of my energy”更自然。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Uh, I think it is important because uh, machines contain a lot of dust. If I don't washing machines, it can't uh, work efficiency efficiently. Uh, so washing and sweeping machines is very essential for me and I need to uh, sweep it once a week.

✓ Uh, I think they are important because machines collect a lot of dust. If I don't use washing machines, they can't work efficiently. So washing and sweeping machines are very essential for me and I need to sweep once a week.

“machines contain a lot of dust”应为“machines collect a lot of dust”，动词用错。句子“If I don't washing machines”缺少动词，应为“If I don't use washing machines”。“it can't work efficiency efficiently”结构错误，应为“they can't work efficiently”。“washing and sweeping machines is”主谓不一致，应为“are”。

× Yes, I read instructions before using a machine on because a machine has lots of steps and I need to follow the instructions to make the machines work effectively and quickly.

✓ Yes, I read instructions before using a machine because a machine has lots of steps and I need to follow the instructions to make the machines work effectively and quickly.

“using a machine on”中“on”多余，应去掉。

× So instruction. So reading instruction is very essential for me and I will follow the steps.

✓ So instructions. So reading instructions is very essential for me and I will follow the steps.

“instruction”应为复数形式“instructions”，因为指多条说明。

× If we don't read the instructions, we can't know how the machines work effectively.

✓ If we don't read the instructions, we can't know how the machines work effectively.

该句无明显语法错误，符合语法规则。

× So instructions can guide us to follow the steps to use the machines very quickly and work smoothly.

✓ So instructions can guide us to follow the steps to use the machines quickly and make them work smoothly.

“use the machines very quickly and work smoothly”结构不清，应改为“use the machines quickly and make them work smoothly”，使句子更通顺。