Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，例如“people can We can do other things”不自然。建议使用连贯的句子结构，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: My favorite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves a lot of time. While it washes clothes, I can do other tasks like cooking or homework, which makes it very useful.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够简洁的问题，如“these two machines, they save peoples a lot of time”。建议简化句子结构，使用恰当的连接词，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of time. This allows people to spend more time with their families or do other activities they enjoy.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，且有语法错误，如“There's so many words”。建议使用更准确的语法和连贯的表达方式。

例: I usually don't read the instructions because I find video tutorials on the Internet more helpful. The instructions often have too many words, and I prefer watching videos to learn quickly.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“We still develop of the Internet”，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法，并保持逻辑连贯。

例: I believe reading instructions is important, but I prefer watching online videos because they are easier to understand. The Internet provides many helpful resources, so I usually rely on them instead of reading manuals.

× My favorite machine in my home is washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the washing machine.

这里缺少冠词“the”，因为“washing machine”是特指家里的洗衣机，应该用定冠词。

× Because of this technology, people can save a lot of time.

✓ Because of this technology, people can save a lot of time.

这句话语法正确，无需修改。

× When the machine is washing clothes, people can We can do other things like cooking or doing homework.

✓ When the machine is washing clothes, people can do other things like cooking or doing homework.

句中出现了重复的主语“people can We”，应删除多余部分，保持句子结构完整。

× Yes, of course, because these two machines, they save peoples a lot of time and when they are washing people can do many other things, like to spend time with families and do whatever they want.

✓ Yes, of course, because these two machines save people a lot of time, and when they are washing, people can do many other things, like spending time with family and doing whatever they want.

“peoples”应为“people”，因为“people”已经是复数形式；“like to spend”应改为“like spending”，保持动名词形式一致；“families”改为“family”，更符合习惯用法。

× Maybe not, because I prefer to find some videos on the Internet on how to use the machine, the instructions.

✓ Maybe not, because I prefer to find some videos on the Internet about how to use the machine, rather than the instructions.

“videos on the Internet on how to use”中第二个“on”用法不当，应改为“about”；“the instructions”前应加“rather than”表示对比。

× There's so many words on it and I don't want to spend my time on this.

✓ There are so many words on it, and I don't want to spend my time on this.

“There’s”是“There is”的缩写，后面接复数“words”应使用“There are”。

× I think it is important to read the instructions, but I don't want to read it.

✓ I think it is important to read the instructions, but I don't want to read them.

“instructions”是复数，代词应使用“them”而非“it”。

× We still develop of the Internet, we can find all of things on it.

✓ With the development of the Internet, we can find all kinds of things on it.

原句结构混乱，“We still develop of the Internet”不合语法，应改为“With the development of the Internet”；“all of things”应改为“all kinds of things”。

× So I prefer to find the videos on how to use the machine, so I don't want to read it.

✓ So I prefer to find videos on how to use the machine, so I don't want to read the instructions.

“the videos”前不需要定冠词“the”；“read it”中的“it”指代不明，应明确为“the instructions”。