Machine— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢电视机的原因，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误和重复，建议简化句子，避免冗余，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: My favourite machine at home is the television because it shows me many interesting programs, such as news and cartoons, which help me relax and reduce stress.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并且补充具体细节使内容更丰富。

例: Yes, definitely. Washing and sweeping machines are important because they save time and energy. For example, people with disabilities can use these machines to do household chores more easily.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和动词形式，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, I always read the instructions because they provide important details about the machine. If there is an error, I can follow the instructions to fix it easily.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用更准确的表达，避免口语化的填充词，并且使句子结构更完整。

例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because they explain how to use the machine safely and what to avoid.

× I like the television because the television is like my friends can show me so many interesting things like the news and cartoon comedy and so many interesting things which release me so many stress.

✓ I like the television because it is like my friend and can show me so many interesting things like the news, cartoons, comedies, and many other things which relieve my stress.

这里“the television is like my friends”中“friends”应为单数“friend”，因为电视被比作一个朋友。"cartoon comedy"应改为复数形式"cartoons, comedies"，表示多种节目。"release me so many stress"中"release"用错，应为"relieve"，表示缓解压力。"stress"是不可数名词，前面不加复数形式。

× Yes, definitely. It's important because it can help people to save the energy and the time. For example, uh, unable people cannot wash the dishes or wash the clothes. The machine can help them. It's a good way to release to release.

✓ Yes, definitely. They're important because they can help people save energy and time. For example, disabled people cannot wash the dishes or clothes. The machines can help them. It's a good way to relieve stress.

“It”指代复数“washing machines and sweeping machines”应改为“they”。“unable people”用词不当，应为“disabled people”。“save the energy and the time”中“the”不必要，应去掉。最后“release to release”重复且用词错误，应为“relieve stress”，表示缓解压力。

× Yes, definitely. Because the instructions can show so many details about the machine. If the machine have some error I can following follow. I can follow the instructions to do some change of do some easy fix.

✓ Yes, definitely. Because the instructions can show many details about the machine. If the machine has some errors, I can follow the instructions to make some changes or do some easy fixes.

“If the machine have”中主语是单数“machine”，谓语动词应为“has”。“following follow”重复且错误，应去掉“following”。“do some change”应为“make some changes”，动词搭配错误。

× Yes, definitely. Because the instructions is like the abstract of the journal article. You can focus on the instructions to know how to use this machine or how many UMM warns about this machine, Which part can do? Which part cannot do.

✓ Yes, definitely. Because the instructions are like the abstract of a journal article. You can focus on the instructions to know how to use this machine or what warnings it has, which parts can be used, and which parts cannot.

“the instructions is”中“instructions”是复数，谓语应为“are”。“the abstract of the journal article”中“the journal article”应改为不定冠词“a journal article”，表示泛指。句子后半部分表达不清，改为更自然的表达。